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Review:Anonymous says:
Great writing, especially in the first few paragraphs. You do a great job of establishing the relationship between the two main characters, and you let James's voice speak so well.

My only criticism is that at times, the story does feel a bit cliche. I would like to see more interaction between the two characters before Lee tells James she's pregnant. Maybe a little less swearing?

Other than that, this is seriously a well-written story. =)

Author's Response: Thank you very much! James's voice and characterization are some of the most fun I've had writing.

Thank you for the criticism. I can understand how you feel that it was cliche at times, as the basis of the story is, indeed, very cliche. However, as time goes on, I would very much like to get away from that and add a new perspective on the teen pregnancy issue. As for the swearing, there should be a bit less as time goes on (though there will be some, as that's more realistic).

Once again, thank you for the review!

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