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Review:CherryBoom says:
I like the idea that you took Rose/Scorpius and gave it a brand new spin. It's very much true that this pair tends to be resident Romeo & Juliet in fanfiction, so it's fun to see that you went into totally different direction right from the start.

Scorpius's personality took a little while before it started to grow on me, but his analytical mind and his observations were quite perceptive. He seems to be in some kind of state of numbness because of the breakup in this chapter, and it reflects on writing very convincingly.

Since we didn't see Rose in action, just how Scorpius sees her, it's pretty difficult to say anything about her yet. It's going to be interesting to see whether you'll stay in his POV or whether Rose gets some chapters of her own as well.

Astoria was very well portrayed. I liked how she wasn't exactly the mother hen, but still cared deeply in her own way about her son's happiness. Draco is pretty distant still, but I'm looking forward to reading chapters where his relationship with Scorpius gets more space.

There were some spelling mistakes, a couple of verb problems and one or two instances where your idea didn't come quite through to a reader. I would suggest a little rereading to catch typos and some such. But all in all, those little mishaps didn't affect too much my reading experience. I have always enjoyed your writing, so I'm looking forward to reading more this story.

This chapter was paced bit slowish, but I do think it's a matter of lengthy introductions and limited action, which will hopefully be remedied in next chapters.

It was an enjoyable read and I will continue reading next and upcoming chapters as well. =)

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