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Review:academica says:
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This is such a fascinating exploration into George's attempt to cope with Fred's death, and I like how he's not even coping in this first chapter. In his desperation, he sheds his own skin to put on Fred's instead, almost as if he values Fred's life more than his own and thinks everyone else will as well. I love the style here, how you used the parenthetical thoughts and eerie observations (like Fred laughing at the use of 'dead weight') to move the plot along. I love the ending, too, because it's so haunting. It sets up the notion that George will not be able to properly process Fred's death anytime soon.

I don't know what you cut out or added in, but I really like this as is. It seems very simple and the flow is great. It really makes me want to read on.

Nice work! :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hello there! Thank you so much for your lovely comments :) I'm glad you found the story fascinating and not too cliched or melodramatic or anything like that! I am being a little liberal with my style here; one of the reasons for the parentheses is to have a kind of a fractured narrative to reflect on George's state of shock and grief etc. I did trim off some excess descriptions here and there, yes; I can get quite meticulous with my editing :D

Alright, thanks so much once again for reading and reviewing this! It really does mean a lot.

-teh


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