So, true story: I was going to read We'll Be Missing You (because if it got to be a featured one-shot at TGS, then it must be good!), but when I saw that this was a Bill/Fleur story I sort of stumbled over myself; ever since writing my own Bill/Fleur one-shot, I've had a soft spot for them, as does tend to happen. And I daresay that I chose well, for I really did enjoy this!
Fleur was so brave in the sixth and seventh books -- I think a thought of people wrote her off after Goblet of Fire as really just being a pretty face, but there's definitely a reason her name was chosen for the tournament in the first place. And I think you got that very well here. I never really had much of an appreciation for her character until I sat down to actually write her (which always seems to happen to me), but she was brave. And her love for Bill, too, was written well, and again, that's a testament to her courage. I loved her plan for revenge on Greyback; that was very ingenious, taking Ginny's wand. I can't imagine being in Bill's place, though, having just lost a brother, thinking he's going to lose a wife... So I'm really pleased that it turned out all right in the end. :3
And you wrote in second person! What an interesting choice for this story -- I'd never have thought of telling this particular snippet in that point of view, but it works. Second person is one of my favorite things to write, actually, and I was pleasantly surprised to find out I'd clicked on a story that uses it. Sometimes when it's utilized it can make the story feel detached -- though, of course, that is occasionally a good thing -- but you still let us into Fleur's thoughts here, which is good. This was a story built on emotions, and second person was a risky but effective maneuver to use on that front, so props to you there!
I really did enjoy reading this, and I'm very pleased that you pointed me in the direction of this story! And while we're on the subject of stories, I'm rather sorry that my review thread's been closed for so long. Hopefully before too much more time passes, I can re-open it; I see you've got quite a few more chapters of Before They Fall up! Hoping to talk to you soon, Jami, and again, good job! ♥
Author's Response: Hi Rachel!!
I've been putting of responding to this because it's just so lovely and ahh. but, here I am!
I was assigned Fleur and Greyback as my strange meeting pairing, and knew I'd have to do a battle of Hogwarts scene. I didn't love that idea, because I just feel like they're over done. But after trying a handful of things, it came back to this. And somehow second person came out instead of first, haha! I was so happy that I stuck with it, because it was such a fun style to write in!
I think Fleur is such an amazing character. She marries a man whose family is some of the most hated by Voldemort, risks her life for the man she loves and his family numerous times, and stays herself no matter how insulted she gets by the female Weasleys. She's just so awesome!
I am so happy you enjoyed this! And thank you for offering to review ♥ I've missed these quite a bit!
Ahh I will be stalking your review thread the day it reopens! And I'm very excited to see if you've think I've improved as a writer from the last time you reviewed Before They Fall.
Thanks again for this amazing review, Rachel ♥