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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi darling! I was looking for something fun to read, and found just that! This was a nice little escape from RL, even if only for a few minutes. To be honest, I don't love this pairing, but I love the whole hate and love sort of dynamic, and loved that you played with some friendly but still not comfortable sort of teasing.

Obviously these characters can't be completely in character to be able to write them together in just a short one shot, but I think you did a good job keeping them similar to there canon selves but giving us enough that we'd be able to see who they are so attracted to one another. If I could make one suggestion, it would be to remove the part about her two top buttons. It's just not very realistic that a professional woman would do that while she's still at work. Mainly because it would be really humiliating to come across your boss and him see that you've unbuttoned the top few buttons of your shirt :P. And you don't need it to get across the fact that he's clearly attracted to her.

This was a really fun one shot!

Jami

Author's Response: Hi! I am glad this made for a fun read for you. I absolutely love the pairing and like to write them in this form usually - flirty, yet sort of uncomfortable awkwardness, lol.

I had the impression that I actually wrote them far from canon (as I usually do), but hey thanks for the compliment!

Hmm, well I like to spice up my "romance" stories, that's why I put in the two top buttons part, but I'll look into it. Thanks for the suggestion!


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