|Review:||Toujours Padfoot says:|
Bear with me here, because even a day later I am still a jumbled mess. ♥
It is so, so bizarrely cool to see this stuff that used to just be ideas in my head on someone else's author page, and for everything to be exactly, and I mean EXACTLY the same as it was in the original novel. Claudius Ptolemy is the exact same character - everything he says, his attitude, his glancing at Cliodna for subtle direction - I just want to bowl you over with hugs because of your attention to detail. You included bits about Grotta people and the newspaper having a field day about Amos, Portia, and Cedric's brief return, and you have no idea how many times I squeed when I saw something I recognized. I am going to reread this story about a hundred times today.
The setting and task of the round itself was sdkfjksfkd. Phenomenal. The mirrors shimmering and then reflecting certain places in Cliodna's Clock - I would pay cash to see all of them going at it in Odo's Pub! And then when you had the countdown, and the sentences between them, I think I died right then and there. I died. I'm dead.
I love how Cedric eyed the pool and was suspicious of it looking like it was too easy, and Severus thinking it was going to be a cinch because his competition was younger and not his genius self. Seeing their different thoughts on the task was very interesting. And then everything quickly became horrifying when it turned out that the Inferi had familiar faces.
Severus seemed to be able to compartmentalize his revulsion a lot better than Cedric, probably because Severus had been around Dark magic almost all of his life and was semi-used to it. The way he regarded his father and Avery contrasted sharply with how Cedric regarded Cho and Amos. But even still, Cedric managed to pull himself out of it, Champion that he is, and kept going. I had so much admiration for him, watching him repeatedly remind himself that they weren't real, they couldn't really be Inferi. ♥ Poor Cedric.
The descriptions of the Inferi themselves was equally awesome and horrifying. Pearl-like, luminescent eyes. Lank hair. Ermehgerd I love that imagery. They were so relentless, pulling at them and saying their names and skdfjkdjf. The ultimate obstacle. I think I probs would have drowned if it were me.
"Your eyes, Lily," he whispered. He reached out a hand towards the Inferius. "What have they done to your eyes?"
Across the water, Cedric's vision was swimming; he shook his head slightly, trying to clear the lights from the edge; they still clustered there, lingering from the hard blow he'd taken to the head.
Everything about all the lights and stars swimming on the edge of Cedric's focus was lovely/scary. I found myself getting tunnel vision while reading about it, and could actually, literally see stars on my periphery. That's how freaking good the writing was.
I LOVE, love, looove Severus's line to Lily about her eyes. I could hear and visualize it exactly in my head, and it was such a Severus thing to say - very hard-hitting, but in essence so simple. It's like, everything Severus says is always so poetic. The way that he arranges his sentences, it's intimidating. But when everything comes down to it and he's in a situation where his emotions are dominant, all of that seems to fall away and he talks like that, and it's shockingly understated, vulnerable. Even in just one little line. I'm not making any sense. Blah. Well, it makes sense in my head, but ANYWAY, BRILLIANT JOB. ~
The word that they had to read aloud, omg. You are so cruel. But it was perfect, ofc. "Victory". I could see Cedric as he read that, and the sardonic, bitter little smile it might have given him.
The way you handled what happened afterwards was sdfksjfdjfdfj. I have run out of words to convey how awesome everything is, so I just resort to keyboardsmash. There was a clear and distinct separation of air between Severus and everyone else. His entire being just radiates the desperate wish to be left alone, to be gone and for it all to be over, and it made me so sad for him. The second you said he had already made his choice, and Cedric won, I was just sitting here like WHAT. NO. SEVERUS, MOVE. But then it explained the reason why he was participating in the tournament at all. It's the only way you can die in Cliodna's Clock, and he wanted to be on the train out of there. So, so heartbreaking. :( But at the same time, it would have been even worse for Cedric to die, and Cedric had more he could do with his 24 hours than Severus. Severus literally has no one on earth he would want to visit.
Ptolemy's confusion about Severus not wanting his last 24 hours before the Vanishing, and Severus's clipped retort that he had no goodbyes to make, killed me. D: You have to stop writing things that make me curl up into a ball of feels, except never stop doing that because you're one of the rare authors who actually makes me feel any feels at all, and you always make me want to jump into stories and save them or boss them around or make them tell each other things.
I already told you this, but I love the part where Severus is relieved that her eyes are green again, purely because of the simplicity of that last thought, and how he let such a last thought be his last thought, and how realistic it would be that that would be the sort of thing you'd think about in your last moment. Something ordinary but personally important, and I'm rambling again.
I want to talk more about Cedric calling him Professor and Amos not being sure he could congratulate his son and the parallel realities and the interference and your very last line about how James was the second man to fall in love with Lily's eyes, but I believe that I am running out of characters. D: I LOVED THIS SO MUCH AND I LOVE YOU AND THIS IS HANDS-DOWN THE BEST PRESENT EVER. SKFJSDJ. ♥ ♥ ♥ Sooo lucky to have you as such a wonderful friend.
Author's Response: It is a special form of torture to haul myself, at eight-thirty in the morning, to government lecture and have THIS be the first in my pile of unanswered reviews. I just. How do. ♥
First off, I've just got to say that I am SO, SO, SO glad that you liked this, because I don't think you want to hear again just how mega-intimidating it was to write something Run-centric. I loved the challenge, and I loved writing it, but every other paragraph I was like, "Is this right?" "Does this sound like Run?" "Oh, she's going to hate this." Ad infinitum. Your opinion is, ofc, one of the ones I care about the most, and on something based off of something YOU wrote it is invaluable. I can appreciate tenfold just how much time and care you put into that story, because I knew, and know even better now, how carefully you had to balance everything to do what you did. Still in so much admiration of you.
Severus's line about Lily's eyes is one of my very favorites in this story. ♥ He was... different to write here then I've written elsewhere, which is weird. But getting to write Snape and Cedric in one story is a joy I haven't had in years. :D I am literally at a loss for words. It's too early in the morning for this. PLEASE BEAR WITH ME AS I BLUNDER THROUGH.
I think it kind of killed a bit of my soul to put Severus through this -- but at the same time, I have to fully agree with you in that it was what he wanted. There was nothing left for him to live for, even in the afterlife. And that's one of the things that strikes me most about his character in your story, one of the reasons my heart always went out to him: He got no reprieve in death. He lived his whole life in the memory of the woman he loved, but who never loved him. (That's a dagger in the heart, that is, you cruel woman.) Blinking into nothingness is the only way he finally got to escape Lily, and there's something in that, even if it hurts the hearts of the readers behind the screen.
I can't even process this. This is one of the most fantastic reviews I've ever gotten, and wouldn't you know that you wrote all the others, too. ♥ I'll say it again -- so, so glad you liked this so much, and I'm honored to have written it for you this Christmas. :3 THANK YOU FOR SUCH A FABULOUS REVIEW. SRS. YOU ARE AMAZING.