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Review:CambAngst says:
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I have to admit, I never stopped to think very much about what it would be like to spend all eternity as a portrait. The glimpse inside the existence of Phineas Nigellus that you give us in this one-shot was insightful and pretty clever. You did a good job of building up his personality in a way that was really believable and consistent with both his family legacy and his Hogwarts house and position. The other headmasters and headmistresses were a nice touch, as well. Their disapproval of his attitude and reluctance to help Dumbledore seemed perfectly in line with the way that they're described in the books. Dumbledore, himself, was very well written. His patience and charm came through really well.

I found myself hoping that Phineas would attempt to converse with Sirius when he was visiting Grimmauld Place. That certainly would have been an interesting conversation. I'm torn between thinking that Sirius would have been too annoyed with his ancestor to be civil and thinking that Sirius would have enjoyed just having somebody to talk to, even if the chat did degrade into an argument. At any rate, his thoughts on how his own existence isn't quite so horrible seemed like a sensible reaction to seeing his great-great-grandson struggle with isolation and depression.

Your writing was very good in this. Everything flowed nicely and the mix of narrative and dialog was good. Your descriptions were crisp and vivid and nothing felt overly formal or sing-songy. Nicely done!

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading & reviewing!

I am glad you think that this was insightful, and clever, and that Phineas' personality was believable. And that Dumbledore and the other portraits were written well!

Hmm, a lot of people had asked that Phineas conversed with Sirius, but I just didn't know how to put it in.

I am glad you found my writing good, over all. Thanks!


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