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Review:shadowycorner says:
This was such a great first chapter. Fast-paced, engaging and it provided these glimpses of the plot and people without being too revealing. At the same time, it wasn't lacking anything in my opinion. Viktor was in the prologue and here we saw Rose. She didn't do and say much, but I already felt some character vibes as she slowly narrated us through the chapter.

I understand how someone might be uncomfortable writing M rated language if they're not used to it, but I think it only proves how versatile you are as an author. It's important to step out of the comfort bubble and just do it. Cursing is real. Many people talk like that all the time. Sometimes it is unnecessary vulgarity, but sometimes it's a part of someone's character. Like in this case, I didn't find it overwhelming, but it painted Heart's character well as this choleric yet determined individual. He actually grabbed my attention more than Rose did and I hope we'll see more of him in a story. He's aggressive but he also seemed like he means well and is dedicated where his employees and business is concerned. I mean, it's his living and it's business, isn't it, so he can't be diplomatic about it nonstop. Oh and as for the lawyer, I feel kinda bad, but I think it was funny when he threw him out. I don't like lawyers as well, so there goes! :D I also like Rose being a writer. It's so easy to imagine and just take as head canon right away. She seemed so sensible in this chapter, it created this little mystery as to what will bring her to fall for Viktor. But after all, we haven't seen all of her yet, which is exciting, because I really want to find out more.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you liked this chapter. I figured since the reader will spend the rest of the story in Rose's POV, I could get away with keeping her in the background a bit here.

I really appreciate what you said about the language -- that's exactly how I was hoping readers would feel about it. It's just part of who Heart is. And I'm really glad you liked his character here. I don't see him as a bad person, just someone who doesn't sugarcoat things. He has his agenda, and he doesn't feel the need to be apologize for it.

Thanks again for another lovely review!

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