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Review:lia_2390 says:
The entire feel of this chapter was quite bittersweet. Not only for Tonks as the narrator, but the transference of her feelings onto her (or your) audience. In your first set of paragraphs, it is much more pronounced. Their feelings, their relationship, as wonderful and consuming as it was, to me there was an underlying tone of remorse - things didn't end well for them. Or maybe it was as your (fantastic) first line suggests…it destroyed them.

Wizards discovering muggle clothing! I loved that, so so much! People tend to forget that, even me sometimes.

I love that this story is so realistic. With any relationship, having to live abroad for work is difficult. It's a brave choice to decide to stick it out. I know a few people who've done it and they are still going strong. All that being said, I think you've set up the conflict here already simply because it is what it is - a (very) long distance relationship. Based on how this story was introduced, I don't think Tonks' sense of relief lasts for so long :(

I appreciate the fact that Tonks is a klutz. I like how, unlike some writers, you have not thrown that fact in my face. Unless of course, a wild umbrella stand appears, and it's all over. Based on how you've written her, I somehow get the feeling that she will have the most to lose. She automatically thinks he'll end the relationship after graduation which revealed some vulnerable spots. It's an interesting contrast between Tonks - the girlfriend and Tonks - the budding Auror.

As for Charlie, I haven't read much stories with him, so I'll save my characterisation until I see things from his perspective.

I think you've got off to a great start here.


Lia

Author's Response: Hi darling! I'm so happy you liked this first chapter! This story hasn't been a piece of cake to write, so your review was really nice to come back to and read ♥

I think Charlie and Tonks would have been such an intense relationship. They would have made each other happy beyond belief, but also more miserable than imaginable. I'm definitely having fun exploring them so far, and I'm so happy you enjoyed my first attempt at a Tonks portrayal!

Jami

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