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Review:TheHeirOfSlytherin says:
Hey. So, I read this this morning, as soon as I saw your status on the forums, but had to leave. So, reviewing now:

I love this idea for a story; I always imagined Greyback was sentenced and didn't die in the battle, even though it's not known for sure, and it's great to see what could happen if he were to be paroled. Greyback's a really intriguing character for me, but I love reading about werewolves and vampires and such, so that's not surprising. :P

I think you've set up the events for the next chapter brilliantly; I really can't wait to find out what Hermione does and whether or not Greyback will he paroled. You've given both Hermione's side and the Wizengamot's, so even with Hermione's story to Albus, I see it going either way. It makes me kinda worry what he'd do if he got out.

I love Hermione in this, that she still fights for others, as I (and everyone else, I'm sure) imagine her to do. I also love Al and that he's joined law and not Auror training; I can always see Al working with law enforcement in some way, but not really as an actual Auror, working with/for his dad. I can't wait to see how they work together to keep Greyback in jail. I imagine he will, after hearing that story, but one can never know until the next chapter comes.

Great first chapter.

Sam.

Author's Response: The Chamber of Secrets has been opened. Enemies of the heir, beware!

Oh, wait, wrong topic. ;)

So I'm glad we agree on a bunch of things. I felt fairly sure that Greyback survived the battle. He seems incredibly durable. I've always felt really intrigued by the way that he embraces lycanthropy rather than feeling victimized by it. It's a gift to him, one that the rest of wizarding kind is jealous of or something.

I'm glad you liked the way I set things up. The real action takes place in the next chapter. Now that I'm looking at things, I might need to up the rating from 15+ to M. Decisions, decisions...

Hermione's dialog was so easy for me to write. Her voice seems really clear in my head. And we definitely agree on Albus's career choices. I never saw him as an Auror. He's too quiet and reserved.

The next chapter will probably go up this weekend, as long as I figure out all of my little plot issues. Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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