Oh my goodness gracious this chapter was FANTASTIC. Even if it wasn't as action-packed as some of your previous chapters have been, I think the fact that this is still written so incredibly shows what a talented write you are! I'm still hooked onto every word, and am dying to know what happens next and where we'll find the characters when we see them again.
I liked that Ron was back in London in similar circumstances to the last time he was there. It's almost bringing things full circle, but not completely, because the results of their trip to London are totally different from when Harry, Ron, and Hermione broke into the ministry.
And the Muggles are starting to notice everything that's happening! I love how Ron can see that they're being totally ridiculous when they crowd around the wreckage like it's some show to watch. If that happened to me, I would be terrified!
I think the way you write Ron really shows how much he's matured because of everything that has happened to him and his family, but we also get moments that remind us how young he is. Like how he'll catch himself thinking things like "Thinking's been a right downer of late" and then chastise himself for it. He's not totally grown up yet, but he's also taking things very, very seriously.
And then they saw Charlie!!! That made my heart skip a beat, and I got so excited and nervous at the same time! I didn't know if he was going to be ok, or if the Death Eaters would see them or hear Ron. But they know he's alive which is such a relief! And hopefully Ron will get some sign that Hermione is ok!!! I just really, really want them to find each other again.
I can still feel how intense Ron's love for Hermione is, and know that he loves her more than anything. I love the way you write those scenes, because they're subtle but really powerful!
Overall, this chapter was absolutely incredible, and it's always such a pleasure to read your work! It's so wonderful and I'm always hooked on whatever story of yours I choose to read! And I have to tell you yet again what an inspiration you've been to me! You've written some phenomenal pieces, and I know that I've grown just by reading them! I can't tell you enough how much your writing has taught me, and you should be so, so proud of your work! 10/10
Author's Response: Oh, Cassie! That seriously means so much to me -- out of all the chapters in this story, I think this is the one that worries me most, possibly because of the lack of action. Your response very nearly brought happy tears to my eyes. ♥
I love writing Ron so much, and there were actually a lot of ties in my head to his breaking into the Ministry! I actually see him in this story as more mature than some of his actions in the books, so I think the fact that this comes across to you is really neat. :) I do think the internal chastising comes from myself somewhat; I tend to think things like that and have to correct myself! Ah, I should not write my personality into stories as much as I do.
I will reveal nothing about Charlie's fate. ;) Although I hear you there -- I really want Ron and Hermione to find each other again, myself! I'm so happy that you can sense how much he loves her through this story, and that's definitely something else I've been worried about in the course of this story, too. I have no doubts that Ron loves Hermione -- not a single doubt at all. But since he's sort of poor at emotional conveyance, it's hard to get that across, you know?
Oh, you just made my entire day with this! I'm grinning like an idiot, and in the middle of a psychology lecture to boot. I'm honored to have inspired you, and I can't tell you what that means to me. ♥ I have goosebumps, because that last paragraph just means /so much/ to me! Thank you endlessly for taking the time to leave me such a positively fantastic review!!