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Review:CambAngst says:
Hey, Sam!

I love the way you set up the party. The atmosphere was immediately recognizable. I felt like I've been to this party before. Couples making out in the kitchen, people spilling drinks on one another, Rose acting strangely toward Al, karaoke starting up... every bit of it was reminiscent of life in my early 20's. Granted these people are all younger, but wizards don't go to college. ;)

I know you've explained who's who in the story before now, but I felt like some of it really started to sink in with this chapter. Putting people together in a memorable situation really helps me out with that.

Chris is an unusually insightful drunk. You definitely picked the right chapter title for this one. I liked the mix of thoughts and observations he offered to Al. Some of them were things that Al very much wanted and needed to hear, like the fact that Chris believes he's going to be a good father. And some things that I think Al needed to hear but really doesn't want to, like the fact that his feelings for Lexi are pretty obvious to everybody except him and Lexi. Good friends can be better than eyeglasses when it comes to helping us get over our own selective myopia.

And not five minutes after he does a very good thing for Albus, he's going to be crashing on their couch? Oh, boy. I'm not sure whether this bodes well for Al and Lexi's relationship or very poorly. Having Chris hanging around the house seems like it would kill any nascent romance. But... he sees the potential and maybe he'll try to play matchmaker a bit. I'm torn, but hopeful!

I think you need to elaborate a bit more on the specifics of this group game that Chris initiates. I can't say exactly what it is without going over 12+ limits, but suffice it to say that I was curious what the rules were and how one "wins" this game. Is there a scoring system?

Moving along to the morning after, it seems that Chris is still quite insightful even when he sobers up in the morning. His one-paragraph breakdown of the night that Al and Lexi hooked up was perfect. It was a splash of cold clarity directly into Al's face. And he needs it. I feel like he and Lexi both need it, for the good of the baby and for their own good.

The only thing I thought you could improve upon a bit in this chapter is the series of events where Chris and Al decide to come back into the house after their conversation in the garden. I got a little lost in there somewhere, and I was surprised when I realized that they were back inside. Other than that, I thought you did a great job with this.

Until next time...

Author's Response: Hey! Wow. I can't believe there are reviews from you that I haven't responded to. ;( *this is about to change*

Haha. I like that it reminds people of real life, I feel like I'm making this story as realistic as I can be. So, thank you. :D

Chris is insightful, but he's more likely to tell you when he's drunk. Unless it's something that's already come up or someone else has initiated it. He wants to be an Auror, but he's not brave. :P

He does. That was his original reason for going outside. He got side-tracked... He might be helpful in Al and Lexi easing in to actually living together, but he's not staying. He'll be gone soon. In fact, you may have already read that part. :P

I don't know if people actually play this game or if I've made it up, but you have the drinks, the shots, and you drink until you literally can't anymore. Last one standing is the one who wins - in the case of this stubborn group, that's probably literal. :P

I'll definitely go back and read through that. Thank you for leaving a review and I'm so glad that you like Chris. :)

Sam.


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