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Review:Toujours Padfoot says:
I loved the second-person narrative! I can't remember if I've ever tried that style before, but it looks like it would be difficult to pull off. Your use of it here was very fitting and it really did make me feel like I was standing in Fleur's shoes.

It takes a lot of different angles to make a character believable, and one of the things I noticed about this one-shot was that it wasn't just Fleur's accent and actions that made her Fleur-like, it was also your sentence structure. You utilized shorter sentences in places and it made everything come out quicker and fiercer - a lot like Fleur herself. So I was very impressed with that.

Fleur gets so much flack, but honestly she was very brave. Brave enough to be selected in the Triwizard Tournament. Brave enough to stick with Bill even when Bill's mother and a few of his siblings did very little to downplay their dislike of her. She had to have felt so unwelcome at certain times, but she stayed anyway. She seems to really like a challenge - living in an English-speaking country instead of in France, becoming attracted to a man who's connected with the biggest anti-Voldemort movement in the world, etc. You brought out every one of her admirable qualities in this story, and it made me like her even more. You reminded us of how much she loves Bill, scarred as he is, and how thankful she is that he's still alive. You reminded us that the Weasleys really are her new family now, and she put herself in harm's way to help protect them, to fight for them even though she hadn't grown up in a country as affected by Voldemort.

Her thoughts about how she didn't deserve to mourn Fred like the others were currently doing was touching and probably very correct. Even though Fred was her brother-in-law, in moments like this you have to put yourself in last place. You have to be the pillar of support instead of the person grieving, because they were closer to Fred. When she said she had to be strong and bottle everything up, that she had lost so little and they so much, displays her ability to detach from emotional events with some perspective for the sake of holding it together. Her parents and sister are safe, and the Weasleys are in the middle of a hurricane. I admire her for recognizing that. She really is an intelligent and empathetic woman.

It was really compelling to get inside her head and watch her assess her enemy, forcing herself to block out her personal anger with him and all he did to Bill so that she could think clearly. What she noticed about his arm, and what she did with Ginny's wand, was a great twist. It shows how perceptive and level-headed under intense pressure she is. And how she makes herself hold back tears until she's in Bill's arms - both very romantic and very fierce. She's such a strong character! You did her wonderful justice.

I enjoyed this a lot. :)

Author's Response: Hi darling! I don't think a review response has even taken me so long :(. I'm so sorry! But this is so scary to reply to!!!

I am happy that you think I did Fleur justice in this! I really don't like when she's the brainless blonde people make her out to be. She's done so much, put her life on the line too many times to not be an incredibly strong woman. And I just really wanted to show that with her.

My thoughts are identical to yours about her being brave enough to become part of a family that is Voldemort's most wanted, and really just endure everything that she never would have had to if she would have stayed in France.

You have no idea how excited this review was to get. I love your writing so much and really look up to you as an author, so yeah I basically just can girl squeed for a few days straight :P.

Second person wasn't intended at first, then it just started happening. Whenever I've written poetry, it's been in this narrative, and it somehow feels closer, like it's breathing down your neck. I'm so happy that you think it worked with this!

Thank you again so much for tagging me, this is going to be one of the reviews I go back to when I get those 'I am a terrible writer and never touching a keyboard again' feelings.

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