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Review:MargaretLane says:
Yikes, he's dead? I'm assuming he's been murdered. Thi has just gotten even more mysterious.

*pokes Daily Prophet for writing in the elf's stutter* It makes it harder to read for one thing and serves no purpose other than mocking the elf.

I am wondering why YOU chose to include it though. Is it just to show the bigotry of the wizarding world or are you trying to show US that Ella has something to hide? Could she be involved in some way? Or is she just upset or in shock at what happened? *ponders* I'm not inclined to take her word for what happened.

Love the comment about it being a load of dragon dung.

Hmm, maybe you are just showing the biases of the Daily Prophet since they seem to be pretty anti-Harry too, but I'm still a little suspicious.

And I love how in so many next gens, people start thinking "yikes, what if Voldemort or the Death Eaters have something to do with this?" whenever something odd happens. It makes sense, because it's only 19 years since Voldemort was defeated and many of his followers or at least people sympathetic to his ideas must still be out there and then there are any children the Death Eaters may have had who were probably virtually orphaned when their parents were sent to Azkaban. They'd be in their 20s now and could well want revenge.

I wonder who Jade is.

Your chapters getting shorter isn't a bad thing. Chapters should be as long as works for them. Longer doesn't mean better. Nor does shorter, of course. If they are saying what you want them to, then they're the right length.

Author's Response: Hi Margaret! Yes, he is dead. It is mysterious... I made the Ella stutter so you can tell that she is shocked. I am sorry if it made the story hard to read and it isn't important if the Elf is shocked, I just wrote it in and forgot all about it. :/

I love that in Next Gen as well! :) Though it is a bit Cliche huh?

Jade is the DADA teacher. At least, that is what she partically is.

thanks again and I hope to see you soon!
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