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Review:The Misfit says:
Hi! I saw your banner request on TDA and I was really intrigued that you had deafness as a theme in your story- I'm deaf myself but I've never seen a fanfic with deafness in it, so it's good that you're writing one!

I don't usually read AU fics, but I'm liking this one. Malfoy and Snape's lack of awareness is authentic, as are the reactions of other people such as Lavender etc. All those "Ohmygosh, I'm so sorry"s are exactly what people tell me too :')

I like that you're being realistic and that you're reflecting Harry's frustration with Hollie's deafness; it certainly does happen in real life and it's good to see someone reflecting that.

I would advise toning down on Hollie's swearing; I know "bloody" doesn't seem that bad but this is an eleven-year-old we're talking about- not even Ron swore that much in his first year ;)

In addition, you might want to add more description. I know we all know what the canon characters look like, but are they particularly dishevelled that day- if so, why? Have they just been in a fight with Slytherins or were they running away from Filch when they bumped into Hollie? Interesting details like that help to draw the reader in and build a better visual of the scene around them :)

Overall I really like this fanfic; I'll keep an eye out for the next chapter! Also, do you mind if I ask- are you deaf yourself? :)

Author's Response: I really appreciate this! it helps me write a better story. and i will definitely take it into account. :) and of course I don't mind you asking, but no, I am not deaf. I've just always been intrigued with sign language. just let me know if at anytime I mess things up! XD thanks again for the feedback! :)

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