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Review:Dezire_427 says:
Hi, Leigh. I'm here with your first review!

First and foremost, very, very well written. You have depicted Louis' fear and hatred extremely well. Not to mention that from the first sentence itself, there's an omnious foreboding to what will come to pass. You also have the uncanny ability to describe in a few words what would take other, less prolific writers many paragragphs to express. Case in point, Molly and Louis' friendship and Fleur's shock and grief. Keep it up!

I will certainly be waiting for more. Just a question : does the story only center around an eleven year old Louis, or does he get older as the story progresses?

Cheers,
-Akansha.
PS. If you find the time, will you check out my new Albus/OC? I would love your opinions and critiques! :)

Author's Response: Hello (:.

Thanks for thinking so. I tried my best to show that he really is scared of the water, and that he associates it with loss, so I'm glad that came through. This first chapter turned out differently than what I had intended. When I wrote that first sentence, it was supposed to lead in to an end-of-the-world type situation. But the more I wrote, it just all quickly changed, and before I know it, disaster's struck in another form. Funny how that happens.

I have up to chapter four written, so more's coming very soon. To answer your question, yes, it only centres around an eleven-year-old Louis. But that's only because what started as an entrant for a challenge, is already wanting to be seven stories in my head. That is, I want to watch him grow up and deal with stuff through the years (loss, friendships, enemyships [haha], hardships, first crush, maybe love, etc.). I've grown attached to him in a really short span of time.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

Leigh

(I've checked out your story and left a review ;).)


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