|Review:||Gabriella Hunter says:|
I told you that I would be here quickly and so, here I am!
This was a very good first chapter for this story and I'm glad that you've started working on it again, I've been really curious on where you were going to go with it! I think I might just love your Scorpius. He seems like a nice guy and he tries really hard, even when he's lying to stay calm when Roxanne is in the picture. I thought the play on his emotions and his hormones was nice too, I don't think I could have done that so well. Writing boys is hard! I don't even write for boys very often aside from Albus and George (And you know how awful he is to write for) so brava!
There were some grammar things but not very many and they didn't distract from the pace of the story, which was really good. I like how you've described Vivian through Scorpy's eyes too, she seems like someone my Astoria would actually get along with. Hm. Considering that my Astoria is older than she is, its sort of sad that they can't go to school together isn't it? Hahaha.
Anyway, I liked the Slytherin dynamics you set up on the Quidditch team and that girl needs to cool her panties! Oh, my Merlin! Is there anyone she hasn't been with and bad Scorpy, falling into her trap! *Smacks on the bottom*
I have a feeling that you might continue on with that little sub-plot but I have no idea. Now! Roxanne through Scorpy's eyes is really fascinating to read, especially when you think of how she was considering him in Paradox. The lust is strong too and his need is almost uncontrollable and I certainly loved that ending! Scorpy can whisper in my ear anytime he likes. Heheheh.
It seemed, eerily like what his father would do in one of my stories...I love Malfoy men. ;)
Anyway, I really like this so far so update soon my dear and I'll be looking forward to more from Vivian too and when are you getting Daughter of Fire up there again? :D
I'm trying to get the next chapter of A Force of Wills done and then its Audrey and Percy again. But I might their chapter done sooner, since I know what I want to do with it. Hahaha.
Oh, and Benjamin says hello and that he'll be under your bed tonight. Enjoy. >:D
Author's Response: Hello!
You must hate me, I've been hopeless lately, I'm so sorry, I've been crammed with exams and stuff but they're all over now so I have some catching up to do.
I promise more will come eventually, I haven't just deserted you. Or my Scorpius. Don't worry, I love him too. He's suprisingly fun to write, even if it might not be a completely accurate portrayal of a teenaged boy. Writing boys is definitly hard! I just hope I do him justice!
Oh Vivian, I like getting another perspective on her and Scorpius is perfect because he is the only one who really knows her. She would definitly get along with your Astoria, they're like sisters!
Ah, the Quidditch team... They are a peculiar bunch aren't they. I'm not sure if I will go into that subplot much more but is just felt right to give the Quidditch team some depth. But yes, Scorpius is a bad boy for falling into her trap. But he can't be flawless, can he?
I'm glad you like this view of Roxanne, it's a bit differnent to how she might come across in Paradox. Silly little boy is letting his lust control him... But I agree, he can whisper in my ear too.
Oh Malfoy men. They are another species altogether, aren't they?
I'm working on Second Choice quite a bit at the moment as some important things happen in it that need to be sorted before I can reveal them in my other stories. Hopefully I can update the next chapter of Twist of Fate soon as that's almost finished and isn't really linked to Second Choice but after that, it will have to wait a bit longer I'm afraid. Daughter of Fire will be continued shortly, I want to edit the rest of the chapters first though as I'm tweaking parts of the storyline.
Looking forward to catching up on your stories shortly. Thank you so much for the review,
P.S. I look forward to my encounter with beautiful Benjamin ;P