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Review:CambAngst says:
Hello, again!

I'm not sure I can really take this chapter in chronological order because, for a change, I read the whole thing through and didn't really make a lot of notes. It had a really pleasant sort of flow to it that way. I started reading and just sort of sank into it like a comfortable chair and the next thing I knew I was finished. So I definitely have to commend you on that.

I really, really enjoyed this idea of Pansy finally releasing a bit of the tension from herself and simply enjoying a night out. I'm sure the wine had something to do with it, but I'm not sure that was the entire story. All of the sudden, it was as though she let her guard down just enough to really immerse herself in the company of her coworkers instead of just tagging along for the ride. It felt good to see her take the proverbial stick out of her... well, you know. ;)

Jonathan is such a character. I really hope I'm still that interesting when I'm old. For a moment, before I figured out what had happened, I had this image in my head of Jonathan having transfigured himself into the chair Clive was sitting in. Even though that wasn't the case, he still has such a mischievous sense of humor. And he definitely warms up to Pansy in a major way in this chapter.

The physical details that you worked into Pansy's stream of consciousness made this chapter so easy for me to relate to. I'm quite certain I've been where Pansy is sitting. I know that feeling of losing yourself in the mood and the flow of the conversation around you, without paying complete attention to what's actually being said. I've definitely been squished on a small couch in a bar and enjoyed the pleasant sensation of feeling somebody else pressed against your side. The whole scene had such a warm, hazy quality to it. I loved it!

Pansy's exchange with Clive near the end of the chapter pulled her character back just enough that the ending didn't feel overly triumphant. She's still awkward and somewhat victimized by her own upbringing. But it's improving.

Uh oh. You left me with a bit of an uneasy feeling. I hope the manor is just dark because it's late and she's had a little too much to drink. Her thought about her mother's knitting early in the chapter felt kind of suggestive. :(

I noticed one thing that might be a typo:

"And so she sat calmly on the coach even though her insides were squirming at the thought of being called ‘common’. " - Couch?

Slow and steady: it not only wins the race, but it seems to be Pansy's motto in this story. Until next time...

Author's Response: Hello!

That's quite okay- I often can't write my reviews for you in chronological order either. :) I'm pleased that the flow of this chapter worked.

I'm also really pleased that you liked the idea of Pansy enjoying a night out with her co-workers. It is a large step for her and yes, the wine definitely had something to do with it. However, I believe that it was also a result of her striving so hard to become a part of their group and her desire to not feel so lonely. And yes, I do know. :)

I'm really glad that you like Jonathan. He's such a fun character to write because he just wants to have fun and rile everyone up.

This chapter was interesting to write as a whole because I had to find a way to write the comfortable place Pansy found herself in without going into so much detail that the effect was ruined. It was a balancing act and I'm glad that it worked out.

Nothing's happened to her mother... yet. I can't promise anything about the future. ;)

Yes, that should probably be couch. She probably wouldn't be sitting on a coach inside a pub.

Thanks for taking the time to review- I really appreciate it! :D

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