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Review:Espresso Patronum says:
I love this chapter! You are awesome!

I'm worried about what his friends will think when he gets 'sick' again, lol. He should use a different excuse though because they'd get suspicious at him getting sick so often.

I think it's unrealistic that the Gryffindors lost 680-nil. I mean, I know you were trying to let on they were really bad, but I would at least have made it 680-50. Or something. Because I don't think if they were actually trying they would ever be that bad.

I really think you got Remus in that badge scene- seems like something he would do. I totally get why it means that much to him.

Eagerly awaiting the next chapter, update soon!!

Author's Response: Hi there, thanks a mil for the review. I am glad you enjoyed this chapter

I know what you mean about the excuses, Remus knows this too, he knows he needs to give a different excuse next time and he will, don't worry.

I know what you mean as well about the Quidditch match, maybe 680 - nil was a bit extreme, but what I was trying to do was build up James as the amazing Chaser who comes into the team next year and becomes this Quidditch hero who turns everything around. Then James just starts getting this over inflated ego after all the attention and praise. So in order to lay the ground work for James, I just wanted to show how rubbish Gryffindor was before he came along, but maybe I took it a bit too far? Don't worry, in the other Quidditch matches coming (against Hufflepuff and Ravenclaw) they won't be so bad, it's just because it's Slytherin. But maybe I'll go and reduce the score-line a bit because maybe it is too over the top. I think I will do that actually. Cheers for the tip.

I am glad you liked Remus's reaction in the badge scene, that caused me a bit of trouble and I had to a few re-writes to get it right, so I am glad you liked it.

Don't worry, next chapter will be up in about 2 weeks.

Thanks so much for the review! I really appreciate it so much.

TLM


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