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Review:crimson_creamcracker says:
I love the concept of the story and I think it's really beautifully written however I'm having trouble connecting to your main character, she feels too cold and I'm not feeling her personality properly. I just don't get it, I'm going to keep reading of course because I'm interested to how it's going to develop...

Author's Response: Hello again (:.

I'm glad that you still like the concept, and that you think that it's well-written. The concept's still new to me, so I'm still struggling a bit, but I'm glad that you're enjoying it anyway.

As for Norah. When you say that she feels too cold, are you meaning in the sense that she seems emotionless? Because I've been trying really hard to show different aspects of her. When she's being the boss, she has to be somewhat detached, despite the fact that she wants to connect with her players too. She's having a hard time trying to find a centre because it's all still new to her. (ha, sounds like I was describing myself there a little. in terms of writing the story, that is xD) But then I threw in some bits of her outside the office. I figured that the little interaction between her and Fred/Roxanne, would show her natural personality a bit more, but I'll see if I can add more to show even more of it.

Do you have an account on the forums, by any chance? If so, my name over there is Caizir. If what I said above isn't what you were meaning, it'd be nice if you could drop me a message and expound a bit on what you meant. I really want my character to connect with readers, so any help on that end would be nice.

Thanks for the feedback, and for reading/leaving a review!

~Leigh


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