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Review:Jchrissy says:
I'm trying to figure out what you're doing with this chapter, more than just the chapter I suppose, but their relationship. Will this be what ends them? Will he die at the hands of war? Will what they know with Tom -- or feel, more than know--?

You said you were looking for feedback on where to go, at this point as a reader what I want to see is something big happen. There has been all this build up, clues and sneaking and meetings in the dark, that I want something to come to light. Whether it's Hagrid being blamed and Tom sulking off in the shadows with his creepy face, or him trying to pose an attack on Minerva or Grimm.. whether it's them trying to prove his guilt and obviously not succeeding.. I just feel like I'm waiting for something.

You know that your writing style is flawless, even with the more complicated narration of this age, it's so easy to sink into. It would make a lot of sense for Grimm to go to war, considering you've been making it a part of this story all along...

On to the last!

Author's Response: Thank you again for reading and reviewing! I'm sorry it's taken so long to respond to your reviews. It's great that we were able to talk this part of the story over via PM because it helped me figure out how I'll work through the remainder of the plot. It will be interesting, to say the least, especially with what still needs to be done with both the plot and the characters.

There's definitely a feeling of waiting in this chapter and the next, an inevitability that haunts the whole novel. Perhaps it arises from our foreknowledge of the events to come. The characters can't know about horcruxes or the basilisk, and my struggle is to find the right place to draw the line. I've given hints of these things, but it's all with dramatic irony. One thing that I can definitely tell you is that Grimm does not die in the war... because I kill him in two other stories.

What's important in your review, though, is that the plot has reached that breaking point and I need to take action. As you say, all of these things have been building and accumulating, and now's the time to start resolving these things. I'm not so great when it comes to closure (being denied closure in a story is something I actually enjoy, so I pass it on to my often-unwilling readers :P).

Thank you again for your help with this story! It's wonderful to hear from someone who has read the whole thing and can see it with a fresh perspective. And your reviews are fantastic! ^_^


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