|Review:||Violet Gryfindor says:|
This is lovely! That struck me from the beginning, which I expected because you wrote it, yet I didn't expect because it's about Harry and Ginny, about whom I rarely read, not willingly at least. The way that you pull readers into the characters' minds with the second person narration is highly effective - the first person wouldn't have worked for this, though I can't explicitly say why. There's something gentler about the narration here that suits the content and style of the rest. The language and imagery are all soft, a moment of quiet in a time of war, and the softer sound of "you" enhances the tone in a way that the higher-pitched "I" could not.
I have no idea if any of that made sense. Needless to say that I enjoyed this one-shot very much. The style of it, with the back-and-forth between Harry and Ginny, put me in the mind of the romantic duets from movie-musicals. My mind practically sung the last few lines of this story! (I visualized the whole thing rather like "Somewhere Out There" from An American Tail. *hides*) It adds to the magic of this story, as does the sort-of innocence of both characters. They love each other without question, and they're able to experience that love from afar through a powerful connection that nothing could break. I've never thought of these two characters in that way, but your story makes me see their relationship anew and appreciate it more than before.
Another stylistic feature that stood out to me was how you distinguished their separate points of view. I worried at the first POV change that they sounded too much alike, but when I looked closer, I saw that Harry's descriptions focused more on nature and included more poetic imagery while Ginny's are based more in the practical and man-made. This could have been caused by their respective locations, but even when Harry thinks about Ginny, his thoughts based in the sensory, from the scent of flowers to the feeling of her hands. I love the part when Ginny steps in the orderly patches of moonlight, or when she sees the frost as lace - she experiences the world very differently from Harry, in a far more Weasley-ish way. Those subtle differences were brilliant to see - you must have taken great care with this story. It feels like every word and image contributes to the wondrous whole you've created.
Wow. I didn't mean for this review to become quite so long, but there was so much to talk about! This is a fantastic one-shot! Every time I read one of your stories, I'm astounded by what you can do with words. ^_^
Author's Response: What a lovely surprise to see you over this way! I have to admit that seeing your name in my list of unanswered reviews brought such a smile to my face; I value your opinion highly, as I'm sure you know by now. :)
One of the more ironic things about this piece is that I don't really like Harry/Ginny as a pairing, and so don't normally willingly read them myself. But I wanted to do another story in the style of "Coming Home," and I've actually had an idea (for years and years, now I come to think on it -- about three?) to write a story about Harry and Ginny when they're separated, as opposed to being together. What can I say? I'm a bit of a sucker for tragic romance.
I've come to find that I adore writing in second person, which isn't something a lot of writers do. (Maybe that's why I enjoy it -- who knows?) I'm so pleased that you liked the style of it! And I'm really never one for overdoing romance, either; all that sappy, romantic-comedy stuff that one finds so often in fan fiction is wasted on me. I'm about realism, and in real life, not everything end happily ever after, you know? Here, things are in the balance; Harry truly doesn't know if he's ever going to see Ginny again, and it's just a small, canon-compliant snapshot of those thoughts.
I'm so glad you picked up on that! I mentioned it briefly in the story -- but Harry's learned to appreciate things like that from Ginny, things like nature and the moon and what have you. It's somewhat romanticized, I think, but it's a reflection of her in his mindset. And the opposite's true, too: Ginny's practical and forward-thinking and action-driven in her sections, just as Harry is while on the hunt for Horcruxes.
I am speechless. Flabbergasted. You know the drill. Thank you so, so much for stopping by and reviewing this little story for me! I can't even begin to tell you how appreciated it is. ♥ You're fantastic, Susan!!