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Review:Jchrissy says:
Oh goodness, you've just melted my heart. I've read a few challenge pieces for this entry, and it's awesome to see how many different situations people have come up with!

Side note: sorry this review has taken forever.

Anyway, this was absolutely heart melting. I liked that Victoire was a bit of a bully, because I think most older sisters are. Dominique also felt natural as well as Louis. I liked your narration style, it matches the thought process and decision making ability of a three year old very well :P.

And poor Mimi! Just an innocent cat in this whole mess, haha!

You did a nice job with subtle hints regarding Bill and Fleur. I especially enjoyed the line about Bill sometimes letting them play in the mud and Fleur being unhappy when they got messy. It made absolute sense and helped add more depth to the story. Then when Fleur did discover her children, she wasn't the terrible mother I've seen her made out to be (which I hate). She was able to find the humor in the situation and I loved that.

The only thing I missed in this was some kind of inclusion of Victoire, even if it was just her snickering behind her Maman's back when the younger two were caught. Obviously it may have been impossible to include her, so that isn't meant to be anything negative in regards to this piece. Clearly I was just greedy for more ;)

Good luck on the challenge!

Author's Response: Note: sorry this response has taken even longer than forever!

Poor Mimi indeed, I felt terrible for her. (Once I was done snickering at her expense, I'll admit.)

You liked my Fleur? *flails* Coming from you -- because your Fleur is absolutely stunning -- that means much more than I can explain in a civilised way.

I could have included Victoire, and I considered it, but I think that seen through Louis' eyes she wouldn't have made sense, because he wouldn't understand the full extent of what she did to him. If that makes sense?

I made it to second place :)


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