|Review:||Leigh Kelley says:|
So, to start off, I haven't read a story with Daphne before. She's one of those forgotten, minor characters, so major points to you for deciding to tackle her.
Now, because she's so minor, you're free to do whatever you like as far as characterization is concerned. She's a pureblood, we know, and therefore it's really easy to lump her with the lot and give her a similar personality. But you didn't, so another point for you. I love how she's so easy to relate to. She just seems like your average day-to-day woman, working for a living, and fortunate enough to be doing a job that she loves. Not only that, but she has an extra few pounds on, so this woman over here can definitely relate to her =P.
Also, I love your description. I love having a scene unfold right before my eyes. I myself struggle with description (tendency to forget to set the scene), whereas you don't. I think my mouth watered a little at the thought of carrot cake.
And shame on you for leaving us with a cliffhanger! Astoria's entrance may have been a bit too dramatic considering the setting, but I still enjoyed it. There may be some gossip about, seeing as she chose to Apparate into a crowded cafe with her trunk, and with the announcement that she's left him (so curious to know who this him is! draco? awr, please don't be draco, aha). I'm so anxious to read what happens next!
I loved everything about this first chapter. I love Daphne and the fact that she's a working gal. I love that she feels something for her friend, who may not feel the same way. I love the fact that she has a klutz for a waitress, and that everything's not so perfect. I love the way you write. I love this.
Going into my favourites.
Author's Response: Hey there, Leigh! Wow thank you for such a wonderful review!
Hehe I'm glad you like Daphne. I really enjoy writing minor characters for exactly that reason- there's so much more freedom with them. It makes me so happy that you can relate to her- I suppose that to some extent she is just your average working woman, although her Pureblood roots haven't left her totally behind. In fact, a lot of this story is going to be about her new, happy Pink-Hippogriff life versus her old Pureblood-y one.
And haha yes- I don't think she could work at a cafe like that with being a bit on the plump side! :P
So pleased that you enjoyed the description- I have such a clear picture of the cafe in my head that I was very anxious to get it across! I too am usually horrendous with description, so it's great that it came off well in this story.
Hmm yeah maybe it was a little melodramatic... Cliffhangers are a guilty pleasure for me and I wanted to do Astoria justice! (And it's okay, it's not Draco- I'm saving him for later chapters!)
It means so much that you've taken the time to leave such a kind and encouraging review- it makes me smile every time I read it. I'm so so glad that you've enjoyed this chapter, and that you've favourited and everything. I hope you'll continue reading!