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Review:Remus says:
Heeey!! Perelandra here from the forums! :)

So I have to say...I never would've imagine Daphne working. She's always depicted to be this very arrogant girl who is daddy's little girl and gets everything she wants with just a simple "daddy, please!!" So it was definitely refreshing to see in the first paragraph a very different Daphne.

I like the description but it felt a little heavy and repetitious with the cake and pastries you know. Nothing big though. I'm craving tea now...so I think I'll make myself a cup now! Hahaha!

I really like the end though! The mystery! Who did Astoria leave? I'm guessing she was abused for leaving like that? Maybe? Totally guessing here! Hahaha! I hope it wasn't Draco though!

Anyway! Great beginning! I didn't see any grammatical problems at all, so great job!

Other than that, that's it!

Until next time,

--Rosie/Perelandra

Author's Response: Hey there Rosie! Thanks for stopping by!

I'm glad you like Daphne's character! I had a lot of fun coming up with her. I think there are a lot of stereotypes regarding Slytherins and I wanted to try and create and character who wasn't just a stock bad-guy (or woman in this case.) That said, Daphne has a lot of family/Slytherin/pureblood-ism issues in her past, and this story is sort of going to be about her finally escaping them...

Hmm, thank you for the point about the description- I'll go back and have a read through... I have such a clear picture of the cafe in my head that I may well have got a bit carried away with it!

Hehe so pleased you liked the ending! Fraid you'll have to wait and see with Astoria- it wasn't Draco though, no. I'm saving him up!

Thank you so much for taking the time to review! This was really helpful!

-Bethany


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