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Review:shadowycorner says:
Hello. I'm here for the review exchange over at the common room.

I have to say I really enjoyed this. Your take on the first person narrative worked out well. I could feel a connection to the character. Her inner train of thoughts was rather amusing and some expressions made me crack up. Also, the entire pink hair scenario and Tam's comments about it were really funny too. I think that your OC is well-rounded for now. She's definitely interesting, not overbearing, as in being too perfect or falling into usual stereotypes of OCs.

I also liked that for this story you pulled out characters that aren't used as often in NextGen. Instead of James and Scorpius and Rose, there's Dom and Louis. And instead of the Burrow, most of the setting will probably take place at Shell Cottage. I love Shell Cottage and there're so many ways you can work with that place and the nature around, since there's some wild creature locked in the trunk.

Which brings me to the thing at hand...I think what makes this first chapter so intriguing that it's not the usual summer romance beginning, which I have to admit wouldn't grab me as much. But you added something new with a hint of mystery that really livened up the potential of the plot. I loved the ending of the chapter of how Tam kissed Louis as to prevent him from opening the truck. It was a brilliant move and a great way for them to kiss without it being too soon or just random. It's bound to create tension and it is from the point of the reader plausible, so great job on that.

I see you haven't updated this in a while, but I really hope you do as I can feel this story has lots of potential. Good luck with writing and let me know on the forums if you update. :)

Liz

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you for stopping by for the review! =)

I was bit worried about using the first person point of view, but Tam's personality emerged practically from the very first sentences. She's so much fun to write.

I love Shell Cottage! I dunno why people prefer to use the Burrow for every little shindig and school holiday, when there's so many other choices. I love number 12, Grimmauld Place as well. That place has so much character on its own.

There's definitely going to be nice doses of mystery and adventure in this story. It's a rather upbeat story, but there will be some twists here and there. While it has some romance, it still won't be the only thing going on here. =)

The kiss in chapter one seems to make people talk a lot.

I've been putting the finishing touches on chapter two here today and probably will continue tomorrow, so hopefully I get the next chapter out before the queue closes for Christmas.


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