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Overall, this was a slower-paced chapter in a lot of ways, but they can't all be barn-burners and it helped to fill in a few more small pieces of Ron and Hermione's lives since they disappeared. It also continued to move the characters and their feelings toward one another along. I really liked all of the developments and you did a good job of continuing to maintain the tension between what they hope to find about their pasts and the "new" lives that they're leaving behind.
The first section with Hermione left me mildly giddy, because I can feel her slipping away from Jonathan. But she's not completely letting go, which was a realistic and moderating touch. I liked the way that she tries to rationalize how much she's been thinking about Ron, blaming it solely on her curiosity and eagerness to learn about her past. A bit of harmless -- well, mostly harmless -- self-delusion to grease the skids.
The awkward "getting to know you" scene in the train car was handled very well. It certainly never would have occurred to either one of them during their late-night encounter to discuss whether they were seeing anybody, and it will obviously be a touchy subject.
"Is it...I mean, serious?" - Ha! Poor Ron, still so clumsy around her.
The way that Ron feels compelled to embellish his own love life just a bit to compensate was classic Ron. And it annoys her! I love it. She barely knows him -- or at least she thinks she barely knows him -- and the fact that he might be dating somebody else annoys her. It's a good think Chelsea doesn't look much like Lavender. Hmmnnn...
Wow. Very interesting that Hermione seems to remember something about Harry, but Ron doesn't. Obviously the effects of Memory Dust are not at all uniform. I am really starting to look forward to your exploration of how the stuff works, assuming that such a thing is forthcoming. If it isn't, consider this my humble petition to see it happen!
Everywhere they turn, there seem to be reminders of the life that the can't remember. I loved what you did with King's Cross and the space between platforms 9 and 10. That was a brilliant little touch.
"'Because there is a solution to everything. Always,' Hermione replied strictly." - She's back, ladies and gentlemen!
So many awesome little details. He thinks that the room is too expensive, but he still won't let her pay. She insists that she can carry her own bags. A "Merlin" slips out -- shhh, don't tell Weasley Twin Mom. ;) The weasel jokes... I love how some of their best moments are small things that really catch my attention.
The ending was really touching for me. Each feels the pull of the other, but they can't quite lower the walls yet. It's sad, but it makes perfect sense.
Your writing was lovely, as always. You have officially crossed the threshold where I'm only going to comment on the quality of your writing if I have a suggestion for a change. Otherwise, just assume that I thought it was magnificent, because it always seems to be!
I LOVE this story. Back again soon...
Author's Response: Once again, I just find myself at a loss for words when I try to reply to this review. You are a dream reader/reviewer.
This chapter was a little slower, also a bit harder for me to write since it was needed to set up some things, like they coming to London. At least it gave me time to make Ron and Hermione more comfortable around each other. They could talk about their relationship status, for example, which was funny because Ron's jealousy just peeked out a little, lol.
The reason why Ron didn't think of Harry doesn't mean they're affected by the MD differently. It's just that these inner impulses and recollections come very randomly and on a whim. It depends on what mental state you're in etc. And to tell the truth, I was a little inspired by JKR there, because she once mentioned she first thought of Harry during a train ride. She also said she was most alike with Hermione, so it just sort of clicked in my head. Ron later feels something familiar about the Platform, so they're both getting these strange reminders from within. :)
Haha, WeaslyTwinMom is actually the beta reader for this story, so I'm glad she let this one slip. I completely agree with her essay/blog post on the issue, it's just become some sort of habit to put the occasional Merlin here and there. :D
Thank you so much! It's so amazing to get new readers after such a long time. This story is also my baby, I worked on this for so long and still am. I am so happy you're enjoying this. Your reviews are absolutely amazing and I can't get enough of them.
THANK YOU! :)