When I was still in high school (which was admittedly only a year ago, but let us pretend I am much older and wiser to add weight to what I am professing), my English teacher said that the most important part of any piece of writing (essays/poems/novels/erotica*ahem*) is the introduction, that opening line which should hook the reader in most completely.
I don't think I've met a finer writer accomplishing such a feat on the internet than you~ With Rona's thoughts "parked somewhere between Guilt Central and Broken Heart Boulevard" how can anyone not resist confining themselves in their bedrooms, sleep deprived, caffeine-deprived and shower-deprived, and greedily consume this godly story till its very end (which I am both dreading and eagerly cheering on!).
I do believe I have fallen in love with you, and you may now begin feeling particularly paranoid of a potential stalker fan-base erupting out of the blue, dedicating many disturbing scrapbooks and such to your Majesty.
*Ahem* Now, back to the chapter; your quidditch game was wonderfully detailed - and reminiscent of the first chapter! It's this strange feeling of going back to the beginning, except... everything's changed. Those changes are emphasised, but there's this feeling that things are starting to fall back into place (almost as they were back in the beginning before everything became wonderfully complicated).
From the descriptions of the dives to Jordan's spunky commentating, you have that Quidditch game set absolutely perfectly.
Beautiful chapter, and... Golly, I can't believe this was the penultimate chapter... I've been revving myself up for this from Chapter ten! Ah, my heart's doing this strange BA DUM BAba*roop BA DUM BA*drop* BA DUM~
P.S. As ever, I love Jason so very much; he's like the cute, little brother every brotherless gal could want! :D
Author's Response: Bahaha, well the first year out of high school, you get wise enough already. Once you get out of high school, really. Waaah, hugest compliment. I am so undeserving ;A; I remember when I first read this review I was like, 'how is this girl still having such nice things to say'; seriously, you can make an author split into a grin so easy :3 like, I'm totally in love with you. LET'S ELOPE~
Heee I remember going around to people asking HOW DO YOU WRITE A QUIDDITCH MATCH, because it's one of those things people avoid writing. Lee shouting random things is the best thing when JKR writes them 8D
Your heart's dropping beats! If it starts doing dubstep, it's probably not healthy.
♥ baww, he so is! You wouldn't want him around /all/ the time, but just as much as you would want a little brother around.