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Review:CambAngst says:
Hello, again! I've had this chapter open in a browser tab all day, trying to get my head above water and write this review. It's finally time!

I love Christmastime at Hogwarts! Authors always have such a good time with the spirit and decoration of the castle and this was no exception! Your descriptions were bright and vivid and easy to imagine.

It seems like Brienne has really turned a corner, at least for now. She's broadening her circle of confidants and hopefully her support network along with it. Her bad dreams are becoming less frequent and the whole outlook of this chapter felt much more light and positive. One thing I wondered was what has happened to Alicia and Katie? I realize that Brienne seems to have grown closer to Angelina, but it seems like she might choose to share with her other dorm mates before Lee.

The twins are hilarious as they contemplate their day's shopping. "Lump of coal for Ron?" - I loved that line. It was interesting to watch the other characters stumble a bit awkwardly around the topic of mothers as they tried to be sensitive to Brienne's loss. You did a good job of capturing the moment and making Brienne's feelings really clear in response. It's nice to see that she's able to handle things.

Watching Brienne and George struggle mightily to try to shop for one another was a really nice touch. If my own experience is any guide, that's the beginning of a solid relationship right there! The middle part of the chapter just has a very fun, back-and-forth feel to it. The contrast between the two pairs was well done.

Angelina's rationale for why Brienne and George should be seeing one another is so solid. One thing that makes your fic really unique among many romance stories I've read on HPFF is having a female lead who really struggles to acknowledge her romantic feelings, or even have them at all in some cases. Most stories with a female lead have her pining away after the male love interest, or loathing him only to be brought together by fate. Brienne's feelings are so different. Very refreshing.

And it seems like maybe, just maybe Angelina's talk is starting to get through. Go, Angie! I love the way you characterize her feelings right before bed. She's a bit dense about love, but she might be figuring it out!

The dream sequence at the end felt like such progress for her! Very nicely done. Even a word of advice from her mother. I'm excited to see what happens after Christmas!

Author's Response: Hi! Christmas itself is actually a few chapters away, the castle is just beginning to prepare for it ;) I love describing it, it is after all the most wonderful time of year!

Yeah, this chapter is mostly character based, building relationships between the girls and boys. Alicia and Katie are in their dorm, but aren't really important to the story. They are more Angelina's other friends and the twin's teammates then anything else, really.

Aw, I'm so glad that you picked up on Brienne's feelings! I didn't want it to be a "longing from afar" story because those can be so tedious and predictable. I think Brienne's feelings are much more realistic and believable, especially in her circumstances. After the massive upheaval in her life the first thing on her mind wouldn't be "I really fancy this redhead, I wonder if he fancies me?"
So THANK YOU for picking up on that and I'm glad you like it :)

Thank you for reviewing!


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