Tagging you from the Review the Person Above You thread in the common room.
The first section of this chapter was simply breathtaking. This is Ginny as I imagine her! Powerful and passionate and more than a little bit obsessive. Quick to anger, but also quick to make up. The unbridled fury that she directs at Harry was humbling to read. I like to think that I can write a pretty good angry Ginny, but I have nothing on the way you wrote her here.
Harry was also beautifully done. You did a fabulous job of capturing the essence of a tortured soul who's desperately trying to stop blaming himself for the whole world's problems but still can't quite get there. I felt so much hurt coming off of him, so much guilt.
I liked the way that you've waited a bit to fill in the back story of how Ron and Hermione disappeared and how long and hard they were searched for. This is a much more appealing way to find all of this out than having it all dumped into my lap in the first chapter or two.
The way that you end Harry and Ginny's section was lovely. Their relationship is under strain, but they'll be alright.
Ron and Hermione's section was another one of those tantalizing, halting, "will they or won't they?" scenes that you seem to excel at writing between the two of them. I lost count of how many times I expected one or the other of them to lose their nerve and simply walk away. The tension between them -- and between each of them and their life away from the other -- was beautifully written.
"Are you stalking me?" - I love that line. It isn't much of an ice-breaker, but it seemed like such a natural reaction for somebody who finds themselves in such a bizarre situation.
I loved Ron's explanation of why he's been looking for her. And I love the fact that you actually gave that dialog to Ron as opposed to Hermione. You're doing a great job of rounding out his character, keeping some of the goofiness and awkwardness but also probing some of his deeper qualities that never shone through quite as much in the books. He has so much depth in this story!
And the way that Hermione suddenly decides to throw it all to the wind and follow her heart, gah! It reminds me so much of the way that she chose to leave her entire life behind and follow Harry on his quest to destroy the horcruxes. You manage to take a totally irrational act and make it rational in her own special way, which is the very essence of her character going all the way back to when she lies about the Troll in the girl's bathroom to protect Ron and Harry. I love it!
I really can't wait to see where this journey they're embarking on leads them. Hopefully it leads her away from Jonathan, and quickly. Do. Not. Like. Jonathan. >:-(
Beautiful writing all around. I love the descriptiveness, I love the dialog and I love the way that you weave the back story seamlessly into the ongoing plot. Lovely!
Author's Response: Aaah -runs around the room for a bit-
I loved writing this chapter, especially the Harry/Ginny part. I was really scared at first, because they're characters I never wrote much of before. I wanted to show that despite all the troubles and differences, they have a deep understanding of one another. Ginny understands Harry has his reasons for not giving in to what he thinks is false hope. And Harry admires Ginny for her determination, envies it a little, but it keeps killing him and blaming him inside. I didn't even plan the proposal because that wasn't where I was headed, but the two characters did it for me. It came naturally and simply and I'm so happy you liked it!
Ron is an amazing character. Yes, I agree that even though he's been fantastic in the books, there wasn't much room to show his full potential. He's funny and goofy and jealous, but he's a guy that cares deeply for his family, is loyal and knows when to step up. He'll have some troubles, of course, but he's a strong one. Oh and I just totally love him.
I love how you wrote that last bit about Hermione. We can totally agree on that. She's so rational, but when she feels it's right, she can cross all the lines just because she believes in something.
Hahaha, don't worry, Jonathan will be now out of the picture for a while.
Thank you again, so, so much. You are making me so happy!