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Review:CambAngst says:
Hello, again!

Oh, poor Brienne. It seems like the Dementors left her a lot worse off. Paisley was a good friend to make sure that she was OK, even while she was worried about her own sister. Her reflections on the memories that the Dementors brought back and the way that they connect her to her mother were painful to read, but very realistic. She has begun to deal with her mother's death somewhat and find a bit of joy in her life, which makes her a more obvious target for them. Probably the saddest part of all was the way that she rationalizes the pain she feels into almost a good thing. Poor dear still has a long way to go.

It was good to see Brienne open up to Angelina. It seemed like a really big step for her, one that hopefully leads to better places. At least for one night, she seems to have rested a bit easier.

I liked the way that you wrote Professor Lupin's return. It reminded me of the books, especially the way he dismisses Snape's homework assignment. I'm not at all surprised that Brienne is struggling with the Patronus charm. There really isn't much for her to be happy about at the moment.

I'm very intrigued by this relationship that seems to exist between Lupin and Brienne's father. And now there's an Auror involved, as well. Perhaps Moody? At any rate, you're developing the sense of mystery quite nicely. All of the different elements of Brienne's life are starting to come together here.

Professor McGonagall's role in Brienne's life still confuses me a bit, I have to admit. At times she seems rather distant, then at other times it seems as though she's taking a very acute interest in Brienne's life. It definitely veered in the more acute direction this chapter, which felt a bit odd in the context of some of their past interactions. This did feel more like the McGonagall I think of. She seemed honestly concerned about Brienne's state of mind and whether she had enough support to lean on. She obviously doesn't think that Fred and George are particularly reliable in that regard, which was amusing.

You ended it on a really high note, I thought. It's good that she feels confident in her friends. I felt happy for her.

Your writing was lovely in this chapter. I couldn't see any mistakes or other issues. Nicely done!

Author's Response: Hi! I'm really glad you liked this chapter!

Brienne was in a really bad place in the beginning of this chapter. I think acknoledging it though is the first step to recovery, though she still has a road ahead of her.

About the Auror: it's not Moody, but it is someone related to a canon character...but is not a canon character themself. If that makes sense. You will see him soon.

About McGonagall, I've had a bit of mixed response as regards to her in this story, I think I'd better go through and make it more consistant xD

Thank you very much, I'm glad you liked it :)


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