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Review:CambAngst says:
Hello, again! I'm back for more Al and Lexi!

I really love what you've done with Lily. She reads like the classic daddy's little princess, the baby of the family. But her sense of entitlement has an oddly comforting bent to it. Al is used to it and it feels so natural to him that he can easily manage her. It seems familiar and almost pleasant compared to the scary uncertainty that Al is facing. Elliot isn't a bad name, either. It was very much in vogue for the year or so after E.T. came out.

The Potters are such a marvelously awkward family. The breakfast scene sounds almost surreal, and Harry's weak attempt at a joke was the perfect compliment to the moment.

I admit that I was a little confused by parts of Al's thoughts about his training. It seems that he doesn't plan on becoming an Auror, but the training is useful for what he actually wants to do. Is he really going to become a bounty hunter or is that just metaphorical? Whatever he's planning to do, it seems like it will involve a lot of dueling.

I remember that it wasn't easy, waiting to tell people when my wife and I first found out we were pregnant. You captured a lot of that awkwardness really well in this chapter, although I suspect that the mother lode is coming up in the next one. This party sounds like it's going to be amazing to read. And there's even karaoke! When the karaoke comes out, you know it's a real party!

I take your point in the author's note about the length of the chapter, but I think I still would have been tempted to finish the story in this one. This chapter does sort of twist in the breeze a bit. Obviously it's setting up some things that are about to happen.

Your writing was great, as always.

Sorry for this review being sort of spartan and disjointed. I was up way too late last night. I'll do better next time!

Author's Response: Hey.

I love writing Lily. There's just something about her. She's not completely rebellious or the bad girl type, but she's not all sweet and innocent either. And she always look on the bright side of things, like with the pregnancy she talks about baby names and being an aunt. She's exactly who Al needs right now, I think. I love the name Elliot, but I already know the baby's name. ;)

Would you hate me if I said I've never watched E.T. all the way through (that I remember). I either fall asleep or turn it off. Don't know why...

He does want to be a bounty hunter (from what I know, they're a little different here in the UK than in the US, but I'll have it as a bit of both). The Auror training is useful for the legal side and for defense, but he won't stay. Dueling? probably, when/if Magical Law Enforcement call him in. It's talked about again in chapter 11, maybe again in throughout the story. It should make more sense then. :)

It's definitely a real party when karaoke comes. I'm more like Al, though.

I really wanted to continue it as one long chapter, even though it would have come to almost 9k. But I got to 6k and thought it would be better to find a good place to cut it. Yes, something's about to happen. ;)

Thank you so much for reviewing! I love every one.


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