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Review:shadowycorner says:
I've read stories about Sirius finding out his world had crumbled many times. This one was definitely one of the most impressive, especially since it's been done in only 500 words. Your language truly amazes me in here.

coercing the bike to shoot a melody of vibrating war cries I love this piece of description. It paints the picture and sounds totally awesome and poetic.

Of course my heart just broke reading this, as it always does. This part of HP canon is something I'll never get over, even though it basically put down basis for the rest of the story. It's just unbelievably heartbreaking how James and Lily died and how Sirius' life was utterly destroyed. I also think it was great that at first, you showed Sirius doubting the fact that Peter would betray them, wondering it might be just a trap. And then as he was up in the sky rushing toward Godric's Hollow, and it was Peter who betrayed them, Peter he had suggested, and then Sirius. It was perfectly written and showed how Sirius truly blamed himself for the rest of his life.

He had never known the depths of his own emotions until Harry James Potter was born. His Godchild. His nephew. A creation of the two people he loved most.

Well thanks, Jami, now you made me weep all over my homework.

It's really great you managed to convey so much emotion in 500 words. Maybe it's not hard with a situation like this, because it's sad no matter how you write it, but your wonderful writing added so much to it. :)

Author's Response: This piece was super sad for me to write because I know eventually there will come a time when it ties into Before They Fall part 2 *still unnamed, rawr* and bahh it's just too sad :( GIVE ME BACK MY MARAUDERS JKR!!

I have to believe that the only reason Sirius didn't fight harder to prove his innocence was because he really blamed himself for suggesting it be Peter and not him. There weren't enough hard facts, he could have easily showed that they were illegal animagi and pulled out the memory of when he told the Potters to choose Peter, then watch it in Dumbledore's pensive. There are just so many ways he could have avoided nearly half his life in jail, and he didn't even try. So I always feel like he must've thought he deserved it until seeing Peter in the picture pulled him out of it.

Thank you so much for all your amazing reviews ♥ I just want to put you in my pocket so when I feel like a crap writer, you can cheer me back up :P.

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