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Review:caoty says:
Okay, this was cute. This was adorably cute. I wasn't expecting to have such a reaction to a fic based on a Snow Patrol song, but... d'aww.

James' voice here is perfect. He's the right mix of sarcasm and adorableness, and I like him. You've managed to go from his self-depreciating humour and teenage boy-ness to the more poetic descriptions of Lily without it feeling jarring, so well done on that.

Minor nitpick:
Seconds later, she's pushing her warms hands through my own locks
Can I just inquire as to who refers to their own hair as 'locks'? :P

Slightly less minor nitpick:
The shift in narrative voice from James-talking-to-imaginary-Lily-in-second-person to James describing his actual interaction with Lily is a bit confusing, because it's just a bit like Monty Python - and now for something completely different... you know what I mean? It's a bit too subtle. I mean, that could be just me being weird, but still.

Also, Imperius curse as a prank? Dude. Pads wouldn't do that (or have I just missed the point and James is just being stupid?).

Anyway. Despite this being rather critique-heavy, I did very much enjoy this fic - I love a good bit of fluff, and this was a very good bit of fluff - and it made me smile. So thank you, and well done. :)

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