OH MY GOD, ACTUAL PHYSICAL CONTACT! Though I do love my slow-growing relationships.
Erm. Anyway. I'm going to spend this review going HOORAY FOR MINOR CHARACTERS, in gratuitous capital letters, just so you know.
So, HOORAY FOR MINERVA. I was not expecting you to write from her perspective, but you've written her well - she's calm and brave and yet infinitely scared at the same time, which absolutely captures the Order's war spirit. Her fond and proud recollections of current and former students are lovely, and absolutely make that scene.
And HOORAY FOR RANDOM ORDER MEMBERS. You've given them all distinct personalities and integrated them well into the Order, which is sadly unusual for Marauder fic. Your Dorcas is pretty cool, and shows no sign of getting together with either Remus or Sirius. Yay.
And HOORAY FOR MOODY. Or rather, everyone's reactions to him. He shows similarities and yet key differences with the man he'll be around the time Barty Crouch Jr. shows up to kidnap him, and the way you've had people making fun of him and calling him out on his chauvinism is just... awesome. It shows the humour and friendly companionship (as opposed to unfriendly companionship? God, I've no idea what I'm going on about half the time) that the Order members still share despite the dark times. Despite that rather cliched description, I actually do love it.
And HOORAY FOR ALICE, because you can totally imagine her as passing down her genetic material to a guy who grows up to rock cardigans and slay Horcruxes. But mostly because she's a really awesome, strong young woman in her own right.
And I could carry on like this for years, so I'm just going to end with telling you how much I adore James and his emotional vulnerability, and brush up on your canon spellings (like Muggleborns and Sorting) will ya? :P
Author's Response: Hiii! Sorry for the forever response. I accidentally caught the Christmas fever early and spent all weekend decorating.. haha!
Minor characters!! Yay! I had so much fun including them in this chapter. I want to introduce them bits at a time, so in Book Two, when we see way more of the Order, everyone already has a good idea of these people and understand them to an extent.
No Dorcas action with either them, that's for sure! And writing from Minerva was SCARY. Dan alwasy tells me to pick the character that knows the least or has the most to lose. And I feel like she has the most to lose in this case, then her voice just started lecturing away in my head and the line, 'are you referring to one of my students as that brown haired thing, Mr. Moody?' popped up almost before the chapter itself :P.
I am so happy you liked this chapter ♥ I'm going to start trying to do regular Friday updates, so you're going to spend even more time over here. Mwahaha. Anyway, errrmm you're awesome, but you already know that. And YES, SIR OR MADAM, I WILL LOOK OVER MY BOOKS IN THE MORNING! Deal? :P