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Review:RosieQueen says:
It's Rosie from the blue vs bronze review battle! :)

This is a really good start! I really liked the characterizations of all the characters, especially Sirius. Lily's 'fiery' temper was portrayed very well, and James seemed just right! I like how you didn't over-exaggerate them, either, which I find a lot in Marauders era stories.

I liked the detail and the overall flow as well. The only thing I'd recommend that you do to improve the flow even more is to check your spacing after some of the dialogue, like here: They know. THEY KNOW!" Lily shouted. There's an extra space after "know." Not a big deal, but it's kind of distracting.

Overall though, I loved this very much! I always enjoy Jily and you're doing a great job with them. :)

~Rosie

Author's Response: Hi Rosie, thanks for stopping by, much appreciated :)

I'm glad you enjoyed the characterisation and flow. And thanks, I'll take a look and see what you mean, like a double space? Oops lol, thanks for pointing that out. Glad you enjoyed it, hopefully you enjoy what's to follow if I ever get around to updating it again lol. Thanks! Bobby xx


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