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Review:Leigh Kelley says:
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Oh, I quite like this. I find that Roxanne is one of the Weasleys that isn't written about often, so kudos to you for writing this from her point of view.

I also love her voice. When she's narrating, it comes off as very pleasant in my head, even when she's beating up Malfoy. Which, I might add, was a great way to start your story. I love when authors just jump right into the thick of things, and reveal things as they go. Much better than having a load of information dumped on my lap right from the word go. While I enjoy some stories like that, something like this is more of a preference.

Now. I'm curious as to why she was beating up Malfoy. I like that you didn't give the reason right away, because it leaves us guessing, wondering, and wanting to read on to discover the reason. It's very intriguing. I can only imagine the type of person that he is, and what he could have done to anger her, a prefect, to the point of wanting to injure him.

Anyway; I like Roxanne. I also like that you didn't make her white (that's a peeve of mine, considering that her mother is Angelina). I'm also curious about the Headmaster (he seems like much the mystery, eh?). All in all, it was a wonderful start, and I can't wait to read more.

~Leigh

Author's Response: Hello there,

Firstly, thank you so much for reading and leaving a review for all my chapters, I will try and get through as many of them as possible now.

I noticed that and as I wanted to do a story with Scorpius but wasn't too keen on Rose and Scorpius because there were so many stories about them, I decided on Roxanne as I pictured her to be quite a fiery character.

I love writing from Roxanne's point of view so I am glad you like her voice. The beginning just came to me, I started off doing a bit of background information but it just didn't seem to flow and then I pictured their first kiss and this just happened to be how it ended. So that's how it started.

Seeing as you've read the rest of the chapters, you will have figured out why it was that peaceful ROxanne was beating up poor Malfoy, but yes, I did want to keep my readers quessing a little longer. Ah, only Scorpius can get under Roxanne's skin like that.

I don't get how people make her white, it just doesn't make sense in my head. I know in the Epilogue, I make Rana and Miram white but that is due to the Malfoy paleness gene and I am also thinking of writing a story about them and it is kind of important that Rana looks like her second cousin Runa. Which is completely unlikely but I couldn't help it.

And the Headmaster? Well he is just an oddball. I'm still figuring him out in my head. Thank you so much for you review and I so please you liked this story.

GirlOnTheSidelines x


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