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Review:CambAngst says:
I have to say, this one definitely had a lot more emotion! Brienne really seemed like things were weighing on her much more in this chapter. I keep rooting for her to open up to the others, but she's plainly not there yet. I have this feeling like George knows that something isn't right with her, as well. That could be a big part of why he's holding back. But I'm sure all will be revealed very soon.

So one sort of nit-picky thing I felt I should mention. Eight feet of parchment seems very over the top. I can't remember ever seeing more than two feet assigned in the books. You normally keep everything so realistic and consistent with canon that it stuck out.

I liked the little bit of awkwardness that the girls share over Cedric Diggory. He always seems to be a flash point for the Gryffindor boys, even if he is a sparkly vampire underneath it all. ;)

Another bad dream. This is really becoming a problem for Brienne. Again, I keep expecting her to finally break down and seek help or comfort from somebody. Soon, I hope!

Paisley is back! I think you've characterized her really well for a Hufflepuff. She cares about her house and supports them, but she's not a maniac about it like most of the Gryffies. And she clearly has some skills with the charms.

Brienne's Dementor-inspired vision was another piece of the puzzle and you delivered it in a very creative way that made a big impact. Using the Dementors was so much better than just a narrative flashback.

You ended the chapter on a strong note, too. Overall, very nicely done.

Author's Response: Hi! You see right into Brienne, I like how you see her so clearly. Brienne and George will take a step in a few chapters' time :)

Haha! Sparkly vampire...I wanted to make a joke about that in the chapter, but I thought it too unrealistic to make Fred say "I don't see what's so great about him, he doesn't sparkle in the sunlight!"

I hope you enjoy the future chapters, and I'm so glad you're enjoying it now! Thanks for saying about the eight feet of parchment, I guess that's NEWT standard but not OWL xD!


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