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Review:caoty says:
Hey there, I'm from tag.

I love Narcissa. I love the Narcissa/Lucius 'ship, and even though it's come to a sad end, I still quite like the way you've written Narcissa - haughty and warm at the same time. And Lucius as the golden boy, the ideal man.

I've got a bit of critique for you though too. Firstly:

and that had been the night she had lost her virginity
I'm... not really convinced by this. The conservative values of pureblood society would probably extend to women's sexuality too, because they'll want to know that any children she has are most definitely pureblood, and therefore Narcissa would probably wait until marriage. That may be just me, though, being all sociology-geek-y.

The Blacks are also known to support the Dark Lord and so Narcissa would probably do so too, in my opinion.

Anyway, despite that, well done with this. :)

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for reading and reviewing.

I love the Lucius/Narcissa ship too. I am glad you liked my portrayal of them.

Thanks for your critique, I appreciate your thoughtfulness. To me, Lucius seemed liked the guy who would lure girls into his bed since Hogwarts, and since Narcissa was smitten by him, I assumed that he would sleep with Narcissa as well - maybe after a little persuading and charming. And I think I am pretty sure Narcissa knew Lucius was a pure-blood.

And if you remember from my story, Narcissa wasn't against the Dark Lord. She was just neutral towards it - being sort of a 'family' person, she didn't want to get involved in the war, on neither side.

Thanks :)

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