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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi there! Here for review tag!

This story has a very interesting premises. I think Poppy Pomfrey is one of those characters that can be fascinating to read about for the lack of information we acquire throughout the books. It gives us a chance to play with creativity a bit more. I've always thought that Madam Pomfrey would, in fact, favor Remus. She watched him suffer so much more than her potions and spells could fix, and I loved the natural feeling of care she displayed for him throughout this.

You do have a few grammatical issues that could use a second look. Things like leaving a letter lowercase after a period, capitalizing a letter after a comma when it should be lowercase, and some issues with punctuating dialogue. Getting a handle on those errors would really smooth the read out, and let your reader be submerged further into your story as opposed to getting distracted by these things.

Remus's pain after Lily and James were murdered (gah, those are two characters that I can't help but get emotional over) was a very nice touch. I like that throughout you kept in mind that Remus had an incredibly difficult life, and let that become part of the story.

One last thing, and this is just a suggestion. Usually asking a specific question regarding the story in your AN, like: "Did you guys like my characterization of Poppy Pomfrey?" or "What did you all think about Remus telling Madam Pomfrey about the Marauders transforming?" -- that can generate more reviews that commenting that people are a jerk if they read it and don't review ;).

This was a nice little read!

Jami

Author's Response: Wow! A long review!
Well, this was my first one-shot, and after I wrote it, I pretty much forgot about it. Then, after I started the review tag thing, almost everyone is reading it! Wow huh?

Well, back then I was horrid with typing with the computer and writing out on something as well. And I didn't get to edit this because I was to busy with my latest stories.

I completely forgot about me telling people to review and if-you-don't-you-are-a-jerk thing. I guess I wrote that because I was in boarding school at the time and was really cranky, and the fact that back then I only got, like, 1 review every month or two didn't help.

I will make changes as soon as I have time (or feel like it) and I am really happy that you reviewed this story.
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