How did I not know that you had a new chapter??? I just looked at my favorite stories list and saw this at the top! Woot!
Okay, review time.
I LOVED being inside Antioch's head! PS, how do you spell that correctly every time? I would absolutely mess it up. I kind of feel bad for the spoiled little guy. Yes, he's kind of a bully, he clearly thinks he's the prince of the castle, but he still wants to be close with this brothers. It's precious. And maybe his bully ways were merely his only idea of how to spend time with them...
then at the end when him and Ignotus were both victims... I really liked that touch.
I loved how much we got to see in this! I'm a huge fan of using those page breaks to switch characters, and I think you did smoothly and perfectly here. Nothing felt jumpy, the flow didn't feel disrupted, and it added a new kind of depth to this chapter. Awesome job!
I feel so bad for Anastasia. Have I already told you that I love that name? And I half expected Poppy's healer to walk in at any minute :P. Ignotus is such a shy little thing... I really enjoyed getting to see that through her. Yes, she's just a child, but this disease has given her an incredible amount of wisdom and you showed that so perfectly.
And they're catipilars!!! Turing into a butterfly!!! That's so much less sinister than the baby basilisk I had them pegged for :P. I love it though, it's pure and perfect.
The further we get into Anastasia's story, the more worried I get. We know it won't end well, but I really want it to. But then... Ignotus asked for the cloak of invisibility. For some reason I was thinking it was the stone, to bring Anastasia back, but he clearly knew better than to try and avoid death. So that means C. had a reason to ask for the stone.. does something happen to Astrid??? I like her :(. It's obvious why our eldest brother asked for the wand, and I have to say you are creating his personality, all of theirs so perfectly.
This chapter kept me so entertained, again I think you made an awesome choice with the different character PoVs in it. I'm always so impressed with your ability to slip into this older style of writing.
Awesome chapter ♥
Author's Response: Hey Jami! Honestly, I want to go hide away in shame because of how long I've taken to respond to your reviews, but this is the first chance I've gotten in weeks!
Mixed feelings about Antioch is exactly what I want to deliver because he does the same thing to me. He's just the eldest of the boys and he wants to feel like it sometimes and violence just happens to come into the picture each time. But I'm SO happy you understand him. Also, I promise you that it took me some time and a lot of backspacing to stop writing his name as 'Anitoch'.
I want to be honest with you, so I'll say that this story kind of inspired Brittle Bones. BB was, in the beginning, supposed to be a companion story to Progeros but I decided against it.
Anyway, I'm glad you liked seeing things through Anastasia's eyes! I have big, exciting plans for her -and for everyone else.
Oh yes, the caterpillars! There's more behind those too! I know this chapter may have felt a little like a filler, but there's a bigger meaning behind them and they'll be referred to again later on. Unless I, as always, change my mind about it.
You know, I don't want to spoil things, but I guess it's safe to say that things don't end well for at least half of my characters. I mean, you already know how things end for Antioch and Cadmus, which is sad because I've grown to love both of them even more than I love Ignotus. It's like... the reason I avoid writing Marauder stories is that none of them gets to die peacefully. And I come here and the same thing happens with the Peverells. Jami, I don't want my characters to die! Let's leave them be happy, troublesome children for now!
Jami, you have no idea how much your support means to me. I know I've probably said that before, but really! You leave me reviews that always give me this boost of encouragement to go on and make me feel that maybe I have a shot at not messing up this plot, and that if I'm on the verge of doing so, I'll have someone who'll notice it and help me straighten things out. So I really can't thank you enough!