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Review:ChaosWednesday says:
Tag! :D

Well, this is a great premise. I liked how the tone mimicked the way a gandmother would tell a story to a small child on a rainy day by the fireplace after being begged for hours to do so...haha ok my imagination is getting carried away but what I mean is that it was just such a sweet, simple tone.

That being said,a few glaring issues stood out for me. I know you said this was your first ever first shot, but one can always improve,amiright? ;)

1)First of all,the story tells us nothing we didn't already know from the books. It is basically a list of Remus' major life events. The lack of fill-in-the-gaps details or just some emotional juice really takes away from the story. It would have been enough to just add one or two events that fit with HP but were never in the books.

2) Mm Pomfrey doesn't seem to have much of a character, or a life? I love minor characters, so I was really looking forward to geting to know her when I began reading thsi one-shot.

3) The relationship between Remus and Mm Pomfrey is really taken for grantedand hardly explored at all. Whywas he her favourite? Did anything happen that bound them together? Etc.

This might all sound like a lot of critique, but all I am saying is this: details could really spice up this story! Details details details!

Cheers!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review!
First off, I nearly forgot about this one-shot. I didn't think people would read it, and pretty much nobody did.

This was my first thing I ever wrote, so yeah, lots of issues. I mainly wanted to point out only the major events, with a slight perspevtive of Madam Promfey.

I am horrid with details.

So just to wrap this up: Thanks for the awesome review, and I will check the story over when I have time.

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