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Review:firefly910 says:
Such a good chapter.

I think what I liked most about it were the political undertones you added. Caradoc is such a good representation of how feelings were towards people who even had a hint of Death Eater in their family history. I'm pretty sure if he'd have known about Beth's family he would have been making snide comments about her as well. But poor Sirius had to bear the brunt of his judgement all by himself.

I always felt that when reading the Harry Potter books Sirius never really felt like he had a place in which he was properly settled unless he was with James. He never really had a family but James' mum and dad welcomed him into theirs and James became so much more than just a best friend to him, he became a symbol for family and belonging.

You portray that side of him so well in his little outburst about his brother and the way he deals with the prejudice he comes across.

And then there's Beth who is in secret correspondence with someone that, if it was found out, would probably get her alienated from most of The Order because of Sev's connections.

I know I'm reading a lot into it but you do bring to light a lot of the politics that were probably going on in the Marauders Era. I can imagine that there were a few more people who were doing what Beth was doing and a lot of people who felt like Sirius does in this chapter.

Love this story so much!! Can't believe I've been away from it for so long!

Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked the political aspect of this chapter, largely because it means that it's coming across. I was a bit anxious, when I first started looking at this and realized how big a part politics was going to play in Beth and Severus's story, because I'd never really had to write that sort of thing before. It was a wonderful challenge, though, and I really enjoyed it! I'm sure Caradoc probably would have been making snide comments about Beth if he'd realized she was very similar, family-wise, to Sirius; Dearborn is quite the snot.

I agree with you about Sirius, too -- he has virtually no family ties, and no canon romantic interest. Really all he has going for him is his friends, and James in particular. James IS his family, which is also why I think he would take it a bit hard when James moved Lily, naturally, to the top of his priorities. I'm so pleased that you think I portrayed it well! You mentioned it a lot in your reviews, but that's part of the "layering" here -- I don't write everything explicitly, but I try and write as much as I can implicitly, if that makes any sense.

Reading into it is absolutely and completely what I want you to do, don't worry! I think it's fantastic that you did. :) I'm sure that Beth wouldn't have been the only one keeping ties to individuals that wouldn't be practical to correspond with otherwise. Thank you for loving this story! ♥ It seems weird, but it makes it so much easier to love my own story when other people do, too. I'm so happy to have your reviews!


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