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Review:CambAngst says:
Hi, Sarah!

As always, Jami has been bragging on your work and with good reason! This chapter was wonderful. The depth of emotion you're able to reach with your writing constantly amazes me. Sirius's despair and grief and madness are gripping.

Even though you pulled some people, places and events from Jami's story, I thought you came up with some really neat additions of your own for this. The way that Sirius learns to manage his emotions in order to avoid the attention of the Dementors was especially clever. I really enjoyed your version of Sirius's sorting. The typical portrayal is one where Sirius is already deeply alienated from his family before arriving and he meets James on the train. I liked your version better. There's just no reason to imagine that an eleven-year-old would have been able to attain that degree of separation from his large and mostly crazy family, no matter how much he disliked them. That spark of kinship he feels with James was also really believable.

All of the flashback scenes you wrote were really warm and funny and made it so apparent how Sirius was able to hang onto that shred of sanity that allowed him to survive. The idea of James sitting by his side in Azkaban, helping him to keep going, made me feel really warm and fuzzy inside. Your true friends never leave you, no matter how terrible the circumstances. And Lily's appearance right at the end was inspiring and heart-breaking all at once.

Your writing was fabulous in this. I can't find a flaw in it. I'm eagerly looking forward to reading more of this story later!

Author's Response: Hi Dan!

Well, this is an awesome little review to find sitting in my inbox. I'm going to have to send Jami a fruit basket or something.

I completely agree with your comment on young Sirius. I think an eleven year-old (particularly one as intelligent as Sirius Black) would maybe start questioning the legitimacy of their family's beliefs, or be relieved at not having to hang out with his older cousins any more... but to already be irreparably estranged from his family? Just doesn't make sense. It's not realistic. So, yeah - that's where that comes from!

I'm glad that I managed to give you the warm fuzzies despite the desolation of Sirius's situation... I was trying to think of a way he managed not to go stark raving mad. And maybe he *is* crazy (talking to your dead friends, whilst quite normal, is not quite the same as seeing them regularly, hatching plans with them etc), but he does seem to realise it, and still be mostly functional, bless him.

I loved bringing Lily into it. For some reason, she never appears quite as clearly as James, but she somehow brings more warmth and comfort (oh - yeah, she appears again!).

Thank you for all of your kind comments, it really means a lot to me to know that a writer such as you thinks that I can handle a story like this, haha! Thanks for reading and reviewing, I hope you enjoy the rest of the story :)

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