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Review:my_voice_rising says:
Hello! I'm here from the review tag...I have to say, this story intrigued me from the summary because I love non-traditional and non-canon pairings! Sadly they are not taken advantage of enough in fanfiction, I think.

I like your description in the first scene, down to the lilac-colored bed and the framed photograph of the trio. I also like how the language and mood changed when she awoke and realized that she was late. Nice touch, there. I also liked that she caressed her Head Girl badge--how very Hermione, she probably slept with it under her pillow for most of the summer!

Some minor nitpicks: Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry should all be capitalized, as I believe should be Head Girl every time you use it. Wouldn't hurt to the check hp-lexicon to figure that one out. :)

So Draco's certainly had a change of heart too, huh? This will be interesting to see! I think it was a bit odd though that Narcissa just smiled contentedly after Draco said he didn't care if her husband rotted in prison; sure she could be mostly over the idea by this time, but I think she'd still be a bit touchy about it all. :)

Good start to your story!

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing. I started this fic quite a few years back and though I occasionally go back and edit the initial chapters, it is still not one of my great writings. Thank you for your kind review though :)

I am glad that you liked the first scene, the little details here and there, and Hermione :)

I haven't looked back at the chapters for quite a while, but I'll make sure I'll keep in mind your comments when I do!

Thanks again!

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