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Review:Leigh Kelley says:
That was a really vicious thing that those girls did to her. Really petty too, especially if James isn't even her boyfriend. I bet they were just looking for the smallest of reasons to pick on her.

I'm curious as to how they got the photo out so fast though. It wasn't a digital camera, right? Since those wouldn't work at Hogwarts. Ah well, it's just a minor detail. Still a curious one though, ehe. Also, you called Smith by the name Smithson a couple of times.

But, I really liked this chapter as well. You're doing a fine job at showing how cruel people can be, without making it too over the top. I'm glad that Clara had friends when this incident happened, because those girls probably would have gotten away with it. Clara's backbone seems a little stronger here, and I think the more that she hangs out with James and co., the more she'll be able to hold her head high. It's quite apparent that she doesn't deserve to be picked on (no one does), and it's high time that she sticks up for herself.

I liked the dialogue in this chapter as well. James wondering about his grandfather, and Severus saying that he's just like him, was a nice touch.

I have this strong feeling that things will get worse for her before they get better though. Bullies don't like being told on.

Reading on!

~Leigh

Author's Response: It was petty. But she was in sixth year and held a silly grudge. I've actually seen things like that happen in action so it IS real, but usually not as bad. :/ They were just looking to pick on her.

The photo thing, you're the first one to ask! :D It's a magical camera, like Colin Creevey had (in CoS) but they are in sixth year so they were much more adept in producing the photo and creating copies for the newspaper/magazine/thing.

Ack! Thanks for pointing that out! I originally had that as her last name but then I wanted her to be related to the previous tormentor so I went and changed it, I fixed that up now. Thanks for telling me! :D

Yup, James and co. are helping her become a stronger person. And that's usually what happens in real life, you make friends and you (usually) become a better/stronger person. :) That's also what I wanted to show, that friendship is important. :)

I'm glad you liked the Snape bit. It was a little sweet. :p

I'm not going to say anything on that subject! ;)

Thanks for leaving me another review, I'll respond to your next one now! :D


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