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Review:CambAngst says:
Hello, again! This story is getting to be a habit for me. I like it.

So right off the bat, let me confess that being from a part of the U.S. that isn't New York City, the idea of people "buying" and "selling" apartments is kind of odd. I get that it happens. I get that it's probably pretty common in big cities in the UK. But it still feels odd to me. Suffice it to say that everything made so much more sense when they found the house at the end.

"Jaimie"? That name sounds vaguely Hispanic to me. I take it the name has some special significance to you?

Lexi is just adorable sometimes. Here she is living in this moment -- preparing to be a parent -- that's sort of the "no turning back" gateway to adulthood, but she can still play the Daddy's Little Girl card with aplomb. Poor Theo doesn't really stand a chance. The fact that he let Keiron punch out Al, well that just put him even deeper in the hole.

You're doing a great job of slow-playing the development of Al and Lexi's relationship. Assuming that's where things are heading, BTW. I suppose you could throw us any number of curveballs, but I'm gonna choose to think optimistically. Moving in together is a great next step. I see so many wonderful, awkward moments coming up for the two of them. Being in the same house in school, sleeping over a lot in your parents' homes... none of that really prepares you for sharing a bathroom with another person, particularly one of the opposite sex. I'm so eager to watch this play out!

I wanted to at least mention Harry's rationale for why Lexi and Al living together is a good thing. It was spot-on and brilliant and very practical. It sounded like Harry.

I'll sort of gloss over the rejected apartments. Each section revealed a bit more about the two of them. Al's reaction to the balcony particularly sticks out. But overall it was just a means of arriving at a place.

Throughout the chapter, you've played up Lexi's hormones and done it in a very believable fashion. But her reaction to the room with the little bears on the wall was perfect. I remember when my wife was pregnant with our boys, the way that she would react so strongly to little things that made her think about babies and children. Awesome touch!

Overall, I enjoyed this chapter immensely. I know it was long, but I really loved the amount of time you spent exploring Lexi's emotions and her observations of Al's reactions. Having a baby is such an emotional roller coaster. This is the way I'd love to see you carry on with the story. Emotional depth is huge in stories like this one, and I don't see it done really well on HPFF very often. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Houses make more sense to me, too, honestly. It seemed easier for them to buy to me.

The name 'Jaimie' was a name I found when I looked at names on a baby site. I wanted a name that wasn't unusual but was a name James could use to get to her. What was better than a name that he can call 'the same as his'? :P It has no significance to me other than that I like it.

Theo will never stand a chance against Alexa, or Kieron if I'm honest. They're a lot like him, and then some. lol.

I guess we'll see what happens with their relationship. I love writing them, so I'm glad you like them. Think optimisitcally. I can't wait to write more of them sharing the house, it's gonna be fun and awkward I bet. :P

Thank you so, so much. I love reading and responding to every review you leave for this story. And I'll be reviewing more of yours this weekend. :)


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