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Review:Illuminate says:
Hi! Tag!

This is a really fun oneshot, a nice crossover of loads of wildly varied fandoms. Mojo Jo Jo! Ha! I love that guy. I think a description of them going on a wild adventure would be really fun to read.

I would suggest putting in a bit more description, as there is a lot of dialogue in here, I would suggest putting in more detail so it's a little more balanced :) There are a few spelling and grammar mistakes too, so I would suggest getting a beta reader over at the forums :)

Good job overall! 6/10.

Author's Response: ahh... the power of review tags... :D

I liked this one shot alot. :D One of my better ones, if I do say so my self... :P

I know I need more description, and DETAILS!!! :O Most of the time I have so much details to write I don't know where to start, (Which is why my essays at school are SUPER long) But lately, I just can't find insperation. All my chapters are getting shorter and shorter.

I have a beta reader for one of my novels, so I might get one for all of my one shots. I am not sure yet.

Thanks sooo much for this review!
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