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Review:caoty says:
Astoria!

She's so much fun. She's a bad girl with a heart of maybe-not-quite-gold-but-at-least-gold-plated, and you show that well. You've clearly had fun writing her, too.

Your imagery is gorgeous in this, especially near the beginning. Honestly, if this fic had been Astoria listening to music for 2000+ words, I would not have minded in the slightest.

That said, your perspective gets a bit muddled up, like it's from Astoria's POV but then:
>...he asked, after being sure his voice wouldn't shake.
Don't switch perspective like that in the middle of a fic unless you're trying to confuse people, it's weird.

And you've still got typos! Even with two betas! I don't know how you do it. :P

No, but really though. This was a fun read, and well done with the challenge, you deserved the win. :)

Author's Response: This marks the very last piece of mine you've read and reviewed, right?? Looks like I better write more so you have more to review ;).

My head Draco and Astoria are very different than most. I don't actually have Daphne dying an Astoria knowing that Draco truly loved her in my 'one day novel' plan.. but I do have Astoria as a not so good girl. Draco more saves her, gets her back to a healthy place where she isn't at bars until closing. And in turn, he basically saves himself. One day I WILL write it. After I finish BTF...

BUT! With the typos... I like to think that people get too wrapped up in my writing to notice the typos... :P. In reality, I'm always adding things so I just add new typos in, haha.

Thanks for review, darling!

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