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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi darling! Iím going to do a running review for this chapter, I hope you donít mind!

This first section. Oh. My. Gosh. Youíve made my day. Pippa is insane. Ted is insane for marrying her. If we donít see something else about her.. Iím going to start thinking the manís a lunatic. Even he canít think a pretty face is worth her annoyance. Poor poor Lucy. And Scoprius is terrible!! But I guess thatís what she gets for saying that heís her boyfriend :P

I loved that you started that first section right where we left off, because it was just such a humorous note to begin on.

For some reason I really like Rose, haha. Iím excited to see more of her.

Thereís so many left over emotions, so much tension in this section with Teddy. I feel so sad for Lucy, because we know what itís taken her to try and forgot him. The line about her knowing heíd be okay without her, how sheíd always known, was so awesome in itís sadness!

I really loved this flashback. I see that Vic and Ted are still together, and I really feel myself disliking her. Sheís so beautiful and conniving, it seems Teddy has a fault for loving gorgeous faces and forgetting about the personality flaws underneath. The way you described Lucyís hurt was perfect. It felt so raw and real, poor girl :(.


Okay, this section at Clemís house did kind of confuse me. I might just be missing something.. only because I canít figure out how Clem is Andromedaís sister. Unless sheís her sister in law from Ted Tonks side.. but her last name is Black. Again I totally just might be missing something, so feel free to tell me to shush if I am ;). I loved the remarks about Lucy painting though. Again, it goes a long way to show what kind of heart break she suffered because she no longer paints.

Ah! He broke up with her and everything can be okay but we know itís not! I really loved the ending!

I think this was a really strong chapter, mídear. Again, my only critic was the scene at Clemís house because I was just trying to piece together whose who in my head. But the flashbacks didnít jolt me, and it seems completely natural that she would have so many covered in the town, then the home, where all these memories happened.

I think the plot is moving at a decent pace, letting us to get to know our characters and piece together what happened so many years ago.

Iím looking forward to chapter 5!

Author's Response: Hi there! I am SO sorry for the delay in answering this! I've been backpacking for over four months without internet, so it's been a while coming.

I'm so pleased you liked the chapter. I know, Clem is... She's difficult. I'm bending canon with her, which might be my own downfall. I just wanted to have another imagery on how imperfect people don't fit into this society. Clem is an imperfect part of a perfect family, which makes her an outcast, like Lucy. I'm trying to curveball it, but it might be a bit weak. I don't know yet.

Thank you for this wonderful review! It really means a lot xx


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